i enjoyed this reminds me that im not alone in such a lonely world

I Cream..... I cream whene'er my gland's in yours, or 'pon your d'formèd face. I cream into your Sunday drawers, which feels unb'liev'bly ace. I cream all o'er the gloves you wear e'en though they're hard t'replace. Your voids I fill with my Swiss roll 'Til cream's all 'bout the place. -10-

Nicely done!

huh? i like it but i dont get it!

Respect paid to the good life they lived - get it.

You've captured the "spirit" of that mess perfectly.

Nice. You've been to Mom's house too?

I like the "sappiness." It follows the over-intellectualizing perfectly.

I wish it was worse, so I could be clever and say: "you need a poem" - there, I said it. But as it is, nice work. Maybe one extra line between "them?" and "Peck"? And too many ands?

a pimple? to me it sounded like waking up and realizing that your life isn't what you thought it was. or....it could just be about a pimple.:)lol (j/k) very good i enjoyed it!

Pleas check spelling and grammar before submitting. Thank you.

"wanting me fully" sounds presumptious. Maybe because "I refuse to concentrate."

The last line is a twist of uncertainty. The rest works.

I'd rather you said what you expect tomorrow to bring, but still it's a common feeling and therefore the stuff of poems.

that was good ...the poetry mean to be the way we understand what life is in the sense of the whole concept of what we are doing here and where we are going ..it's a nice poem in this way

That was good ..

that was good ..descriping why you are sorry ..is good ..i like it

Simplicity create its own beauty ..I am not sheakespeare but honestly that is a nice sonnet ...u are talented with bright future ..

I understand what ur mood was ...we despair about our exsitence ..actully lost in the concept that is traceless without any clue ..at that moment the world is pretending of the beauty and glory has made us to think we are so weaker...then the whole world is

that's really good ..i think some poets had already done that ..I am glad that u try to do sth different from the other .