Four and a half paragraphs of silence

by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?

Member since 2003 · Posted 20 Jul 2004 · 8 comments

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[10] Stephen Robins 20-Jul-04/1:41 AM Reply

This is very close to my poem "projective verse". However you have made it your own by excluding the word quim.

[n/a] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? › Stephen Robins 20-Jul-04/11:30 AM Reply

Yes. I was just pushing the genre to new bounds. Ideally, this poem should be read from a helicopter and radioed to the audience back on the ground.

[n/a] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? › ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 20-Jul-04/11:30 AM Reply

I forgot to add: you would have to be in a sound proof boothe inside the helicopter.

[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 29-Jul-04/2:58 PM Reply

And preferably travelling away at a significant portion of the speed of light, so that there was a Doppler effect on the sound of the poem.

[10] edpeterson 20-Jul-04/9:45 AM Reply

unspeakable

[n/a] Prince of Void 29-Jul-04/1:40 PM Reply

that's really good ..i think some poets had already done that ..I am glad that u try to do sth different from the other .

[9] Ranger 16-Oct-06/9:00 AM Reply

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[10] Stephen Robins 23-May-07/6:01 AM Reply

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