Yes, I like the reform as well.

I very much like this poem. But I have a comment similar to Zodiac's. When you I read "gives me wings," I thought Red Bull.

Why is the bombshell gonna drop? Is she drinking too heavily?

"A cask such as this holds so many memories" So basically, the day after I black out, I should look in the bottle from which I was drinking.

Beautifully done, Ed.

nb -- definitely works best if read aloud

Yeah...you've captured city life...nice work

To be or to ravioli??!! Oh gosh darn, I love those food metaphors! Sweet stuff.

My feeling from this is that you know her, but that in reality you're not so sure she really knows when to wear white...

Yet another vast plethora of ellipses... as always your work bears the hallmark of "unbelievable talent" -10-

I think the fact that you have devoted your life to the pursuit of guff, whilst simultaneously trying to justify your folly by claiming to have chosen the humbler, more intellectual path to Jesu, is definitely one of your most undermocked qualities. The other being your appallingly low academic rank, which, despite all your efforts to convince us otherwise, is not bolstered by your incredible age. Your friend, Doug

does she have a penis?

i think that one "never" would work better

The indentation differentiating between Then and Now works very well.

"I could not connect- and be absorbed in a stardust high" excellent line. the rest leaves me...unkempt.

The black sequined clutch-perhaps. I don't like the questions. The rest is dandy.

Hmmm, something about this that I like, even though it doesn't make any sense to me.

May it never drop, if not from this barfly, then some other. Cheers

Or she knows when not to wear white, maybe never. Seems too many seasons to end first.

I like enough shrouding to let me draw my own conclisions, but I don't like riddles, and this reads like a riddle.