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I Dream..... (Free verse) by frdup717
I dream about my hand in yours, and of your warm embrace. I dream about my lips on yours, and the smile upon your face. I dream about the love we'd share, and of your beauty and grace. The void you fill inside my soul -no one can replace.

Up the ladder: stains
Down the ladder: this pain

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.3333335
Weighted score: 5.3585887
Overall Rank: 3336
Posted: July 29, 2004 2:43 PM PDT; Last modified: July 29, 2004 2:43 PM PDT
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[10] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.113.159 | 29-Jul-04/3:09 PM | Reply
I Cream.....

I cream whene'er my gland's in yours,
or 'pon your d'formèd face.
I cream into your Sunday drawers,
which feels unb'liev'bly ace.
I cream all o'er the gloves you wear
e'en though they're hard t'replace.
Your voids I fill with my Swiss roll
'Til cream's all 'bout the place.

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[n/a] Shuushin @ 207.5.211.177 | 29-Jul-04/6:19 PM | Reply
"and of your beauty and grace."

meter needs tweekin, maybe... :

"your beauty and your grace"

Good for what it is.
[n/a] frdup717 @ 4.29.181.60 > Shuushin | 29-Jul-04/8:26 PM | Reply
your right about the tweek
i knew it sounded off somehow
[6] Bachus @ 24.130.62.63 | 29-Jul-04/9:47 PM | Reply
Death by vagina.
[10] tisa7 @ 4.14.129.6 | 30-Aug-04/2:21 PM | Reply
who is this about
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