Good concept, mostly well done-- though I think it could be shortened a bit. Blessed with eight.

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You always were one for 'going solo', but I never thought you'd actually pay homage to the virtues of self-stimulation in quite so public an arena. For that, sir, you are to be savagely mocked beyond thunderdome. Good day.

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Brilliant, you really do your homework. I like cock.

That is simply because you are not experienced. But for 5 bucks a hit... you could be.

Inexplicibly good! I get a great feeling from this. Both intimate and delicate. 10

This is a good sketch for the poem that evolved from it.

Wow! I can't understand the low scores on this one. Even when your writing is a little unhinged I find you establish a feeling. Maybe it's just because I'm a nature nut.

This is probably the worst poem you've written, but I'm saying that loosely. I was wondering why I was reading it by line two.

I have no idea why I like your poetry, but that's a plus.

You hit every cliche known to man like a homerun of shit. Good one, somehow you pulled it off.

I always wanted to know how old was the oak trees that we had in our back yard were. -10-

Hilarious and serious???

My middle brother lives in Los Angles, and I went to visit him. so I can relate to what you are saying -10-

I like this man! -10-

The title and concept are great, actually. The poem is just a very raw explaination. Give us some imagery and try to work in some poetic devices. I think you have over-explained it in this version so please don't waste your time on trying to clarify the idea in later versions. Just make us feel the way you feel.

The title and concept are great, actually. The poem is just a very raw explaination. Give us some imagery and try to work in some poetic devices. I think you have over-explained it in this version so please don't waste your time on trying to clarify the idea in later versions. Just make us feel the way you feel.

I believe that the goal of great poets should be to appeal to everyone equally. I hope this edit accomplishes that goal for this poem, my brothers in words.

Sounds like love is a game of penny-ante poker with God as the dealer and the queen trumps the king everytime.