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The first three verses great. And the mulberry tree lines are good - seem to complete the moth lines. But in between, well, why?

The first six lines are good, but Einstein's Relativity is not "like" these things.

'someone else could.' "porkpie hat"?

Mathematically, Brownian motion is a Wiener process.

Quite good.

Love is a dog from hell- Charles Bukowski. Love is a live dog in a Korean kitchen (non-existent)-Dan garcia-Black

Are you the lightning, the oak or the result of the meeting of the two? I like being the moss on the North side never seeing the sun. The lightning was bright. It was fun to watch.

Great imagery! Sounds like a love poem to me though...

Your usual Poemranker therapists are out today. Perhaps the above canines and this will help. By the time you understand love, it may no longer interest you.

A delightful fancy that seem calling for meter, even rhyme. I'd sacrifice rhyme though for a steady rhythm.

What a squalid and ignoble dunce cap, on a poetic career of steadily diminishing returns. -10-

Yes, I like this piece too Intransit, my ol' companion, but there is an issue which bothers me: potently... "portently" Is not a word, atleast according to my dictionary, so I believe it's "potently" that you wished to utilize in the poem. That aside, I bless thee with nine. Go In Peace Brother...

A masterpiece. Ten.

Solid work. Nine. Go In Peace.

Better than your last. I've never felt a monsoon, but almost can. Could do without "The most poignant pictures it brings," Check punctuation and grammar in the last 4 lines.

I liked this enough to read it twice. Which is good, as I clearly have adult ADD. Two suggestions: 1. The second "trying" from line 5 to 6 is redundant. More powerful once. 2. A few more line breaks would help break it up a bit and give it more punch. Good effort. 7.9

The language acquisition device in your brain seems to have horribly dysfunctioned. These are not sentences.

Needs quotation marks around the first two lines or the poem looks like some misguided tense experiment.