Why the ' after boxes? "bone wheel" is a stretch, isn't it? the last line reminds of my recent "The Rockets' Song" Thinking of the vererans. Maybe a period after boxes, then "Each wheel clicks . . ."

Very touching

Finally ending in the the ABC's of Divorce.

My own version of: MUSIC SWIMS BACK TO ME By: Anne Sexton.

Aahh I'm going through this right now: Believes HE can seduce me with a dance Clings to me and purrs and ultimately fails. To put it bluntly it this poem was a car your transmission just slipped. Overall I thought this poem was lacking in rhythm.

You never cease to amaze. Always striving to reach new levels of ignorance.

Answer: There's little difference. How does this deconstruct religion or even challenge it?

A parp; yet only a parp.

amen!

Dark Angel Thanks for the encouraging words it's much appreciated 10 is quite some score.

Dovina Is that a Michael Jackson Bad.

I like this enough to spend a little time with nitpicking... A few comments: (as I read it out loud): Line 10: omit "the scent of" - better w/out it Line 11: Just "cast", not "casted" Paragraph break after line 14 ..."balcony." Line 15: "Gazed in awe" is kind of cliche-y. Line 18: He already gave you his hand a few lines back. Line 27: "thought" instead of "though", ok... Sorry to analyze too much ..guess I kind of like the fantastical aspect of this poem. Like I like the movie "Willow". Or "The Neverending Story." But not the "Neverending Story Part II." That may have sucked worse than "Grease 2" with Michelle Pfeiffer.

Omigod I am an only child but now I think I might have a sister.

OK now, I have to pipe in... 1st stanza is brilliant... I want to help stanza 2 somehow... with less words? More subtlety? ...but love the line about troglodytes... also, please tell me, if anyone, where "Tycross Zoo" is? Danke schon.

A little confusing point-of view-wise but I am into it big time anyways?

I'm compiling a list of things nentwined was probably doing with -=Dark_Angel=-,P.I.'s $1 instead of server maintenance during the week poemranker was down. Freely contribute.

What the fuck have you got as grounds for misuse? this is a rating website, so you're a colossal twat, get over yourself cocknose. I can see it now fuzzylogic(plaintiff) versus the world - reason for the case, people called me names on a website, Christ's wet nappy you're a snivelling lump of stale shoe butter.

Ok. this is the first poem that shows AND tells. Integrate the first half with the second. That's a metafor I've never seen bephor. Short circuited until fixed.

1The name was interesting, but it was too long to read properly.

Do you really mean, “I would be once more the man in which you had fallen in love.”? If you like the ambiguity, change only “which” to “whom.” “Ready to take its place.”