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Black (Free verse) by WithoutLife
"When will she wake up..." Black... I only see black... "We don't know yet..." What happened? "Open your eyes little one" Voices from above... "It'll be ok" Where can I be? "Come back to us," What is this warmth? "SHE OPENED HER EYES!" An.. angel?... "How are you honey" What is this black liquid coming up? "It's ok, its just charcoal" Where are my clothes... "Don't let her get up!" Curtains... IV... "You were off the charts, honey... BAC... 406" Please no more tears.. "You're lucky to be alive." I want to say, I'm sorry... "You'll be ok" The light is disappearing... "Nurse!" Black.... "DOCTOR!"

Up the ladder: Nothing's Forever
Down the ladder: Shattered

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.75
Weighted score: 5.2086053
Overall Rank: 4486
Posted: December 7, 2004 11:38 PM PST; Last modified: December 7, 2004 11:38 PM PST
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[10] blacksoul @ 204.215.34.148 | 8-Dec-04/4:24 AM | Reply
Very touching
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