regarding some deleted poem...	Caducus 80.229.129.138	21-Dec-07/3:37 AM
Limp.
Re: Happy Birthday by jessicazee	Dovina 208.127.120.77	21-Dec-07/11:13 AM
The Christmas timing makes me wonder and chuckle. But I think it's tender and not Christmasey, but affectionate and giving. At least that's my take on it.
Re: Milk and gas by Caducus	Dovina 208.127.120.77	21-Dec-07/11:17 AM
a sad tale well told.
Re: The Least of These by Dovina	Ranger 86.140.67.149	21-Dec-07/2:59 PM
Love the last stanza, and bits here and there also appeal. Stanzas one and two are nice but could be reworded to be a bit more, well, poetic. The sickly kids section is also promising, but I don't really like the word 'kids' in poetry. And I hate seeing life rhymed with strife. It's only a flying visit I've paid, but I have read this a couple of times since it was posted. Hope the Christmas season's treating you well!
Re: Happy Birthday by jessicazee	Ranger 86.140.67.149	21-Dec-07/3:02 PM
Aside from the punctuation not scanning well at the start (it's the hyphen that threw me) this is excellent.
Re: Little Robin by Jessina	Prince of Void 77.237.66.60	23-Dec-07/10:26 AM
A nice poem ...
Re: Addendum to Engine Braking BY INTRANSIT by sliver	INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197	23-Dec-07/10:45 AM
Been busy lately, couldn't get round to the ranker. Obviously not the way I was going, (though I did miss my mark ) there's potential here. Drop- Then the, as the, hot brakes, until, a sign, fuck it. condense the jake line and the following line. Make jake a capital OR a corporation.
Re: Sight Reading by Christof	INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197	23-Dec-07/10:53 AM
If I could find fault with this, I'd be a professor. That's a compliment, Sir.
Re: Happy Birthday by jessicazee	INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197	23-Dec-07/11:00 AM
I don't know what you're doing. I just know it's working.
Re: Milk and gas by Caducus	INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197	23-Dec-07/11:03 AM
I wouldn't have gotten that but that's my ignorance about Plath.
regarding some deleted poem...	INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197	23-Dec-07/11:04 AM
It's offical. I hate you. Congrats.
Re: Shiver by Skamper	INTRANSIT 69.23.157.197	23-Dec-07/11:12 AM
Oh gross! Swap existances competing, drop the hyphen, swap fingers driven. I think you could lose lines 13 and 14 and do no harm. Gross. I love it.
Re: Travails of one decade by Prince of Void	Jessina 61.1.237.31	24-Dec-07/12:38 AM
A nice poem with difference.
regarding some deleted poem...	malpaso 70.233.147.22	26-Dec-07/3:56 PM
what a superb portrait of a child growing like a tough beautiful flower from the dung of his father's shadow---I loved it!!
Re: Flickering Eyes by Jessina	Prince of Void 77.237.65.86	27-Dec-07/8:46 AM
The dream that has changed world The dream had snowed my mind Where the shining was about to reflect beyond On the mount of where the divinity was born The infinity of love has fathomed all horizons The exitance was not contained of this world The world Where these two worlds’ve been lost It’s time my longing eyes are raining my heart And my lips are kissing my soul to fly away To where it belongs as it’s following the dove but my love is still trying to keep world away from wars making all decayding days from fears making that dream fade away in this human greed just ashes will remain nothing more than a fist can be gained once there was a heart now there is love last forever The love is giving the peace to those seekers of peace and love Mery christmas ...and thanx for ur comments and also ur beautiful poems has enchanted my mind and my heart
Re: Suicide Note(I Blame Me) by alvinb	LynnJR 205.142.108.5	27-Dec-07/1:20 PM
Good poem, a little melodramatic in spots, but overall portrayed with depth and emotion. The rhyme scheme was pretty good, "All my agony mist" seemed a little awkward and "black as a pit" a little cliche(ic), I loved the line "all that were left was memory's last breath" - Good job on this.
Re: Milk and gas by Caducus	malpaso 70.233.147.22	27-Dec-07/5:18 PM
outstanding!!!
Re: Day Dream by Jessina	Jessina 203.199.41.148	28-Dec-07/4:17 AM
very very nice
Re: Amphetamine Witches & Scrabble by Bachus	SupremeDreamer 69.236.68.172	28-Dec-07/11:33 PM
Debased soul in the devine body of methylated illusion.
Re: Sosomizing My Way Into Heaven by Bachus	SupremeDreamer 69.236.68.172	28-Dec-07/11:38 PM
Despicable and utterly delightful. Those saved for a dead god musn't be wasted. That would be a real sin that should be prevented.