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Addendum to Engine Braking BY INTRANSIT (Free verse) by sliver Then the air brakes
Staining to hold the load
As the curve looms
Insidious asphalt
Dying to kill
Hot brakes
Nothing but a jake
Standing between me and death
Until salvation arises
A sign
Runaway ramp ahead
Fuck it
The alternative is death
Up the ladder:
A sky not our own
Down the ladder:
Hey
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Posted: December 14, 2007 10:18 PM PST; Last modified: December 14, 2007 10:25 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.1422777 Overall Rank: 5489 Comments:
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Obviously not the way I was going, (though I did miss my mark ) there's potential here.
Drop- Then the, as the, hot brakes, until, a sign, fuck it.
condense the jake line and the following line. Make jake a capital OR a corporation.