-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
on Spectrum Of Passion by Mickey Pig Knuckles
15 Jan 2008, 4:07 PM
Thank you so much for sharing your gift of literature. This is one of the excellentest poemes I have read today and it doesn't matter that it doesn't rhyme because not all poemes have to rhyme you idiot.
Couldn't He have just gone round to someone's house and cleaned up?
Excuse me for asking, but is this poem about Amy Winehouse?
I closed my eyes, until they hurt,
And prayed it would go away,
But when, again, I opened my eyes,
This poem still looked really gay.
i like this. well done!
"Deep fascinations, shallow understanding" That ought to be everyone's goal
Answer to Question 1: none
Answer to Question 2: everyone
Get involved here: http://www.hopedevelopment.org/ or somewhere, else cry in your beer.
ok, but get the grammar right, it irks me.
I don't like cummings so a comment would be unfair.
An aged wipe is but a paltry thing,
A tattered rag upon a stick, unless
Buttocks sally forth and cling, and bravely cling
To every blemmish on its scrunched up mess,
Nor is there parping school but studying
Monuments of its own brownificence;
And therefore I have sailed the seas and come
To the holy city of Brownium.
From "Sailing to Brownium" by William Butler Yeats
Beginning a new thread like a charismatic renewal of an old religion, this is an answer to atheists, a declaration of victory in the battle between enlightened secularism and Christianity. Or stated with recognition of human frailty, as Jesus taught to state, I preface anything I say with realization that Betelgeuse is 800 times the sun’s diameter and is so far away that nobody living today will see it, but only its light sent hundreds of years ago. And though it is unimaginably big and far, much greater things were flung by someone (Oh, sorry, that presumes too much.) My mistake, of course, is inferring God from science, instead of not-god from science.
Now where were we? Oh yes, we were relating morality and religion. Or stated another way, we were relating principles that hold society in harmony, with ideas about God. They seem unrelated to me, but I find it interesting that most religions hold the same morals in regard to stealing, killing, fraud, and the like. Religions differ on morals about the eating of bats, the covering of women’s faces, and the killing of insects. The first set of morals derives from polite society’s needs, and work just fine either couched in dogma or without religion. The second begin with writings and cleric’s decrees. Just because these “morals” get stuck into religion does not make them part of true religion. What could the eating of bats have to do with recognition of God? Jesus made this point clear, as anyone can see from reading him apart from later writings of his church. Christianity is about Christ (duh) not about superseded Old Testament texts or something a monk wrote in the fourteenth century.
In summary: don’t get me started.
2 yrs later i still enjoy reading this poem... 5yrs after my divorce. and we my ("ex" and i) run into eachother. and i didn't care anymore.. the pain is still there from what he did.. but i don't carry it like i use to..
Hey, is this the Jessica that went to Park??? let me know if you are!!!
This is a fabulous poem. The language is impecable and each stanza has been beautifuly crafted to carry its own weight. Well done.
Do you really think your tears and your heartaches are greater than any others? "Do not be surprised at the painful trial you are suffering, as though something strange were happening to you." I Pet 4
The rhymes are forced. Rwanda deserves better.
good except penultimate stanza. Adding supernatural is a disappointment. First 5 verses are best.
Yes, a good statement, not too didactic. Not bad.
Can lose "as a sack" I think
"ugly" can go too
Line 4: "a young . . "