regarding some deleted poem...	LynnJR 70.166.7.178	15-Dec-07/11:42 AM
wonderful poem, magnificent ways you paint the emotions and feelings, you set up a scene , frame by frame for the reader, and cleverly and creatively tell us your heart.
Re: blobby blob by MR Blobby	Garrett S Sexton 81.158.77.170	16-Dec-07/11:04 AM
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Re: Blobby blob code ** by MR Blobby	Garrett S Sexton 81.158.77.170	16-Dec-07/11:09 AM
CODE? Yes, yes it is so clear now. Watch Deal or no Deal!
Re: wolf rose by titan69	Garrett S Sexton 81.158.77.170	16-Dec-07/11:11 AM
I'M GLAD!
Re: Return from Dubious Mission by Dovina	Garrett S Sexton 81.158.77.170	16-Dec-07/11:12 AM
This is SHIT!
Re: wolf rose PART 2 by titan69	Garrett S Sexton 81.158.77.170	16-Dec-07/11:13 AM
never do a sequel man.
Re: Return from Dubious Mission by Dovina	some deleted user 63.127.193.79	18-Dec-07/5:37 AM
I like what you've done here Dovina. The only thing that seems off is the word "gobs." Everything else works fine.
Re: The bakers wife by Caducus	some deleted user 63.127.193.79	18-Dec-07/5:43 AM
I have always been impressed by your metaphors and there are some good ones in this piece.
Re: I think of you by nicole081083	LynnJR 68.15.29.164	18-Dec-07/11:43 AM
very lovely poem, the feelings were expressed adequately, nice flow and rhyme.
Re: Broken by makelovenotwar	LynnJR 68.15.29.164	18-Dec-07/11:47 AM
very deep and emotional poem, I liked a lot, can relate to the feelings expressed. I didn't like the format of how it is laid out, i dont think the lines should run out so far, the only other critique is the line that ends in yay! don't like yay! any way I enjoyed the read.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 75.82.99.11	19-Dec-07/11:50 AM
I like the parallel last lines of V1 and V3. Good throughout, except: What have you got against punctuation in last line of V2, since you use it throughout?
Re: Shiver by Skamper	Dovina 75.82.99.11	19-Dec-07/11:53 AM
Very spare. Too spare I think. First verse is good. "creating moments" is overused, especially standing alone. "issues slick"?
Re: The Least of These by Dovina	jessicazee 24.160.246.91	20-Dec-07/11:29 PM
I repeated "a stranger warmly fed" a few times out loud. Good feelings. Didn't love "as sickly kids in Pakistan" (to clarify, I LOVE those kids), but not sure your specificity there works. Last stanza's first two lines are as striking and good-ending-y as it comes, but the last line seems out-of-place? Really liked this, thanks for making me think, inspirational. 9
Re: The Least of These by Dovina	Caducus 80.229.129.138	21-Dec-07/3:23 AM
5th Stanza will court controversy and as its an opinion of the writers you may be asked by some to elaborate on it. Like baby in the hay but dont like sickly kids in.... Line 2 needs to end with - is, or a link to next line. I think you can say this shorter with more impact and leave out your thoughts and write from a neutral ground.
Re: I'm in love by nicole081083	Caducus 80.229.129.138	21-Dec-07/3:25 AM
Very generic and exclusive for two. It totally lacks originality and rhyming does not validate it as a poem.
Re: Portsmouth Belle 5 by Garrett S Sexton	Caducus 80.229.129.138	21-Dec-07/3:31 AM
Weird, Chauceresque.
Re: Nine by MacFrantic	Caducus 80.229.129.138	21-Dec-07/3:33 AM
Goes on a bit but how it all connects stanza to stanza plus the fact that it engaged me has to be thumbs up and not two fingers. Reads well.
Re: This Poetry Thing by LynnJR	Caducus 80.229.129.138	21-Dec-07/3:34 AM
bang.
Re: Broken by makelovenotwar	Caducus 80.229.129.138	21-Dec-07/3:34 AM
Is this a joke?
Re: Go Ahead by makelovenotwar	Caducus 80.229.129.138	21-Dec-07/3:36 AM
As appealing as britneys hole.