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Broken (Free verse) by makelovenotwar My heart is all black and blue from all the abuse it has been through.
no more abuse not more pain all beacuse my love for you isnt a game.
im tired of your lies and all the crap you say as i leave my love for
you behind my heart is screaming yay!
for no more abuse no more pain and sorrow how my heart will heal but not
by tommorow
how could i have been so blind to see how much loving you was hurting me
i dont care anymore because im free from all the pain your love caused
me
Up the ladder:
Aurora
Down the ladder:
Returneth
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Posted: December 16, 2007 6:37 PM PST; Last modified: December 16, 2007 6:37 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.0794687 Overall Rank: 6423 Comments:
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LynnJR @ 68.15.29.164
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18-Dec-07/11:47 AM
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very deep and emotional poem, I liked a lot, can relate to the feelings expressed. I didn't like the format of how it is laid out, i dont think the lines should run out so far, the only other critique is the line that ends in yay! don't like yay! any way I enjoyed the read.
Is this a joke?
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