Nicely put together D.

Well done, old chap! 10.

I guess every smart ass comment is an image of the speaker's character? I don't think so! It's there opinion!

Dovina I let my son read your poem he's in the fifth grade, and they are just beginning to study chaos. He was very amazed the way you had it organized.

i couldnt even be bothered to read this - this site is for poetry not essay - 5 because it looks like you might have put effort in any way -emili

for some who sick of complaining you seem to whining alot - 3 - - emili

I thought it was ok.

I really don't understand all of it but the parts I do understand make the poem sound good.

I rate you 10.

Dude this was great. I don't think you read me this one but I know what you mean.

For some reason when one person writes the first time the second always follows with I agree with who ever was first. That's stuipd but funny. Who were you talking about in the poem?

i wish i could erase my memory of reading this poem.

Dude, Eli, who told u that?! I don't remember ME saying that. . .Was it Sergio?! Anyway, LOVELY! MY VERY FIRST FAV!

Jebus, this is why I say you are my best friend. . .New one, you should've read me it first, Eli!!! >.< I love it. You know why, too.

very good: clearly communicated sentiments, clever language, strong structure. repeating "the" at the end of l10 and the start of l11 is particularly felicitous. i have several questions, however. first, i assumed the passenger was a child (i.e. describing buildings as blocks, noting the children at play, wishing to engage in tactile experiences common to children, "begging" the driver.) but on the other hand, you say the speaker wishes to "find a poem today," which is a more mature sentiment that's incongruous with the previous descriptions. this might be a question of narrative voices (i.e. you are interpreting or clarifying the passenger's immature thoughts.) but the following philosophical reflection on circular thought seems even more incongruous and cannot be easily explained away by narrative voices, so the poem comes off as bipolar: at once the voice of a child and a philosophical poet. last, i find difficulty with the poem's name: the wren's circling doesn't seem apt for describing the passenger's mode of thinking: "I want to lag behind the others." although i understand you might say that the passenger’s thoughts keep circling back to objects outside the car, i think the link to actually circling an idea or desire, approaching it from different angles, and eventually coming or failing to come to some conclusion is weak. rather, i think it seems more like a discursive thought process reflecting on lagging behind to experience nature, the fence, etc. overall, though, the poem is well done.

have you ever been to Cardiff? - 10 -

yah. this gives me a chubby.

this appears to be a bunch of rambling nonsense - 3 - -lia

hello, pink bunny

clear and clever imagery. the last two stanzas, however, are tritely phrased in comparison with the rest. also, since we don't know anything about the speaker, that she sympathizes with our corpulent friend has no effect on the reader beyond allowing him or her to make an inference about the speaker's character. otherwise, an enjoyable poem.