regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 205.188.116.199	28-Apr-05/12:31 PM
It's funny how everyone seems to know what your needs are more than you do. I can see people cringe when they think I am going to recite one of my poems. Friends, family, it doesn't matter. I guess that's why most of us are here, looking for acceptance.
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 205.188.116.199	28-Apr-05/12:41 PM
I'm glad you wrote in that last stanza, I was going to chew you out! Nice prayer. Why don't you move next to me so I can be that neighbor who's prayers are answered.
Re: Iterated Fuck by nentwined	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 82.39.21.58	28-Apr-05/2:39 PM
I just want to reiterate my total, total horror at this poeme. I've seen so many unbelievably sick things on the internet that I don't understand how I can feel so morally violated by what is, when you get down to it, a description of ordinary, unkinky, consensual sex between consenting adults. I think it's because I keep imagining Rockmage peeping out from a closet to watch, his beard all a-quiver. -10-
regarding some deleted poem...	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 82.39.21.58	28-Apr-05/2:42 PM
Muncie lol. Muncie is the laughing-stock of the state that's the laughing-stock of the country that's the laughing-stock of the world.
regarding some deleted poem...	http://mulberryfairy 216.195.165.7	28-Apr-05/7:29 PM
This has a couple good phrases in it, if you wanted to make it more poetic and less like a diary entry. Maybe play s'more w/ these three lines: He left with a bloody nose and a "tissue for the road." I care for him but we're just faking comfort. Somehow, it lacked the grace you gave to things.
Re: FREAKIN by celticskatermatt1	http://mulberryfairy 216.195.165.7	28-Apr-05/7:39 PM
marshmallows when spelled correctly can still rhyme with cellos
Re: In the aspens by sliver	http://mulberryfairy 216.195.165.7	28-Apr-05/7:47 PM
nice. I like "We unwittingly spit on the history Of souls stained like ours"
Re: Untitled by http://mulberryfairy	sliver 207.200.116.130	28-Apr-05/7:50 PM
And with that he's gone. Now you're changing sides?
Re: FREAKIN by celticskatermatt1	sliver 207.200.116.130	28-Apr-05/7:52 PM
Only because you misspelled cello
Re: The promise by thepinkbunnyofdoom	sliver 207.200.116.130	28-Apr-05/7:54 PM
The first stanza reminds me of my friend Skip, "Stay out of my mind, there's things in there i don't want you to know." Good visuals.
Re: Hanging Gallows by Hadasl	sliver 207.200.116.130	28-Apr-05/7:57 PM
What does Zodiac know? I like it.
Re: Fingers Are Soldiers by somemorepoetry	http://mulberryfairy 216.195.165.7	28-Apr-05/7:59 PM
fine writing
Re: The Resilient Woman by Joe-joe	sliver 207.200.116.130	28-Apr-05/8:02 PM
What is a ship? Alex
Re: L'Étoile by Shardik	http://mulberryfairy 216.195.165.7	28-Apr-05/8:04 PM
yes quite
Re: Lost key for a hall-closet by zodiac	http://mulberryfairy 216.195.165.7	28-Apr-05/8:09 PM
Loved this part "Then she's tucked, like laundry wearing rumpled laundry, in the old crotchless, scallops..." I got the sexual undertone, though not the way you intended it; I was thinking the key was a metaphor for some masturbation tool at the end.
Re: Returning by Dovina	sliver 207.200.116.130	28-Apr-05/8:12 PM
If only more of us would open the doors of our minds. I enjoyed the first stanza very much.The rest wasn't bad, ...
Re: Prayer For The Church by sliver	http://mulberryfairy 216.195.165.7	28-Apr-05/8:27 PM
What's outrageous? Papal praise is What's disgusting? Condom bustin' What's outrageous? Celebate priests is What's forbidden? alter boy smitten What do we want? Condoms! When do we want 'em? Now!
Re: Las Gaviotas by Bachus	NoSage 207.200.116.130	28-Apr-05/8:39 PM
I hate to admit I like this, but I do.
Re: Untitled by http://mulberryfairy	Joe-joe 68.194.47.34	29-Apr-05/2:01 AM
Hello Mulberry. I hope all is well with you. Why the orientation change? Why not just find another man?
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 212.118.19.76	29-Apr-05/4:25 AM
I don't believe God cares much whether or not you talk to Him in James's English. It's not His native tongue, anyway, and probably not the one He speaks now. That and you have to worry about all those unfamiliar conjugations, like "Give me only Thineself" rather than "Give me only Thee". And you have to worry about sounding like a world-class schmo. Anyway, please consider changing all the Thees, Thys and Thous to Yous, Yours, and Yous, respectively. Thank you. Please also note that any pronoun referring to God should be capitalized - i.e., I beseech Thee... -10-