| Re: Unbroken Horses by Caducus |
ALChemy 24.74.101.159 |
19-Dec-05/4:05 PM |
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There was a time when men were hard living, gritty, stubborn SOB's and women were everyday saints. It was a different time that called for a different kind of people. Do not judge or praise them by today's standards. They did what they felt they had to do.
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| Re: Your Words by TLRufener |
Dovina 69.175.32.104 |
19-Dec-05/4:31 PM |
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Sounds like you have exaggerated what really happened by thinking about it in too much negativity. Would he really "laugh in my face To reinforce my every fear"?
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| Re: philosophy of a new age by crazyknight |
Dovina 69.175.32.104 |
19-Dec-05/5:27 PM |
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Hold onto the things you believe even though they've been proven wrong. In various times, all things are right or wrong. It's a messed-up philosophy, and it's not even haiku.
Or maybe youâre getting at the eastern ideas of self: âThe reason I have an enemy is because I have self. If I no longer had a self, I would no longer have an enemy.â Emptiness â the void inside the pot for which the pot was made.
And if thatâs a bit foreign, try this: âThe father is his daughterâs son.â â a Christmas mystery to think about.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
amanda_dcosta 202.83.45.117 |
19-Dec-05/6:22 PM |
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Not bad. I am a nature lover and i appeal to themes like this rather than the emptyheaded flow of words by some poets here, which make no sense. Good work
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| Re: Pledge by D. $ Fontera |
crazyknight 202.56.231.116 |
20-Dec-05/10:07 AM |
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| Re: Aisle by the bread counter by Caducus |
Dovina 69.175.32.104 |
20-Dec-05/12:20 PM |
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Finally, you're writing plainly, understandably, as if convinced. And still it is warm.
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| Re: Pledge by D. $ Fontera |
Dovina 69.175.32.104 |
20-Dec-05/12:25 PM |
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Verses 1 and 2 set it off very nicely. Then it muddles into something apparently important to you, but not very understandable as written.
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| Re: Unconscious by MacFrantic |
Dovina 69.175.32.104 |
20-Dec-05/12:28 PM |
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I wish I knew what you are talking about. It sounds like it might be interesting.
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| Re: The Calling by PoeticXTC |
Dovina 69.175.32.104 |
20-Dec-05/7:28 PM |
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I like the subtlty, the different presentation of an old story, especially the last 5 lines. Welcome to Poemranker.
Some suggestions:
Heartfelt, they watch
Tears of rain.
They stand amazed. (Why change person?)
Continue theyâre gaze.
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| Re: Temptation by PoeticXTC |
Dovina 69.175.32.104 |
20-Dec-05/7:35 PM |
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Try starting with Line 4 and omitting the first 3 lines. Also, the semicolons are distracting. For example, try, "He speaks the recognizable to my soul." and "Without knowing, he speaks the language of . . ."
I like, "My needs stray from his tongue."
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| Re: Privacy Compromised by Dovina |
PoeticXTC 137.139.192.56 |
20-Dec-05/8:45 PM |
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Lmao, Im tripping over your last line, krayz!!!
"Unmasking faith behind dogma dispelled-slipped hint's of me."- Curious as to what you meant by "... slipped hints of me."
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| Re: Cupid promised me, Nadine by Shardik |
PoeticXTC 137.139.192.56 |
20-Dec-05/8:52 PM |
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Beautiful poem. I'mma sucker for love myself and this poem is the mirror image of my love for someone else. I truely loved this poem.
You have my heart at "..'til the light of me flicker-sighs-..."
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| Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w |
PoeticXTC 137.139.192.56 |
20-Dec-05/9:06 PM |
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| Re: Pandora's Box by PoeticXTC |
cyan9 217.40.63.105 |
21-Dec-05/3:35 AM |
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1st verse is very good, conveys the anger/power well. 2nd verse fades off a bit and is less coherent.
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| Re: Privacy Compromised by Dovina |
crazyknight 202.56.231.116 |
21-Dec-05/6:57 AM |
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simple meaning,
deep words
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| Re: It's Time by PoeticXTC |
crazyknight 202.56.231.116 |
21-Dec-05/7:05 AM |
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Its time u realise,
time is not important.
For the finite, it doesn't really matter,
for it really makes no difference.
For the infinite, it doesn't really matter,
for its there and there..........
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| Re: Unbroken Horses by Caducus |
crazyknight 202.56.231.116 |
21-Dec-05/7:11 AM |
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never forget the salt in life for its what gives the taste to the adventure.
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| Re: Privacy Compromised by Dovina |
zodiac 69.132.67.140 |
21-Dec-05/8:46 AM |
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| Re: Never Let Go Again by TLRufener |
cyan9 217.40.63.105 |
22-Dec-05/3:59 AM |
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Oh the drama of it all, how will I ever go on living without you? well, Frankly my dear, I dont give a damn.
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| Re: Blackout, Amman, November, 2005 by zodiac |
cyan9 217.40.63.105 |
22-Dec-05/4:09 AM |
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