Sounds like you have exaggerated what really happened by thinking about it in too much negativity. Would he really "laugh in my face To reinforce my every fear"?

Verses 1 and 2 set it off very nicely. Then it muddles into something apparently important to you, but not very understandable as written.

Finally, you're writing plainly, understandably, as if convinced. And still it is warm.

I wish I knew what you are talking about. It sounds like it might be interesting.

There was a time when men were hard living, gritty, stubborn SOB's and women were everyday saints. It was a different time that called for a different kind of people. Do not judge or praise them by today's standards. They did what they felt they had to do.

My cup of tea

Hold onto the things you believe even though they've been proven wrong. In various times, all things are right or wrong. It's a messed-up philosophy, and it's not even haiku. Or maybe you’re getting at the eastern ideas of self: “The reason I have an enemy is because I have self. If I no longer had a self, I would no longer have an enemy.” Emptiness – the void inside the pot for which the pot was made. And if that’s a bit foreign, try this: “The father is his daughter’s son.” – a Christmas mystery to think about.

Not bad. I am a nature lover and i appeal to themes like this rather than the emptyheaded flow of words by some poets here, which make no sense. Good work

I like the subtlty, the different presentation of an old story, especially the last 5 lines. Welcome to Poemranker. Some suggestions: Heartfelt, they watch Tears of rain. They stand amazed. (Why change person?) Continue they’re gaze.

lol, nice poem...

cabbage.

failure

Try starting with Line 4 and omitting the first 3 lines. Also, the semicolons are distracting. For example, try, "He speaks the recognizable to my soul." and "Without knowing, he speaks the language of . . ." I like, "My needs stray from his tongue."

Beautiful poem. I'mma sucker for love myself and this poem is the mirror image of my love for someone else. I truely loved this poem. You have my heart at "..'til the light of me flicker-sighs-..."

1st verse is very good, conveys the anger/power well. 2nd verse fades off a bit and is less coherent.

simple meaning, deep words

Lmao, Im tripping over your last line, krayz!!! "Unmasking faith behind dogma dispelled-slipped hint's of me."- Curious as to what you meant by "... slipped hints of me."

never forget the salt in life for its what gives the taste to the adventure.

Oh the drama of it all, how will I ever go on living without you? well, Frankly my dear, I dont give a damn.

Its time u realise, time is not important. For the finite, it doesn't really matter, for it really makes no difference. For the infinite, it doesn't really matter, for its there and there..........