The Calling

Member since 2005 · Posted 20 Dec 2005 · 3 comments

An old star descends from the sky, Thou shall not mourn. Shimmering bright and strong, New life is born. Trickling from the heavens, Feel no pain. Heartfelt, theyâd watch Tearâs of rain. The star glistens, We stand amazed. Fireflies in the night Continue theyâd gaze. Leave behind little memories, Except for few. They saw in love; sincerity, his heart They saw, they knew. What little they knew, tiny they know He shined bright. Little there was to say; to see, They saw his light. That star; he smiles, heâs going home Father calls That star, he smiles, âIâm on my wayâ.

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[6] Dovina 20-Dec-05/7:28 PM Reply

I like the subtlty, the different presentation of an old story, especially the last 5 lines. Welcome to Poemranker.

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Heartfelt, they watch
Tears of rain.
They stand amazed. (Why change person?)
Continue theyâre gaze.

[n/a] PoeticXTC › Dovina 20-Dec-05/8:32 PM Reply

I was trying to create the image for my generations (My grandfathers' grand children and great grand children)perspective of our grandfather. They watch, they cry, they stand amazed, they keep watching.... that's what I was aiming for.

[5] Dan garcia-Black 25-Dec-05/1:49 PM Reply

They saw his light.
That star; he smiles, heâs going home
Father calls
That star, he smiles, âIâm on my wayâ.
Happy Kwanza