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The Calling (Free verse) by PoeticXTC An old star descends from the sky,
Thou shall not mourn.
Shimmering bright and strong,
New life is born.
Trickling from the heavens,
Feel no pain.
Heartfelt, theyâd watch
Tearâs of rain.
The star glistens,
We stand amazed.
Fireflies in the night
Continue theyâd gaze.
Leave behind little memories,
Except for few.
They saw in love; sincerity, his heart
They saw, they knew.
What little they knew, tiny they know
He shined bright.
Little there was to say; to see,
They saw his light.
That star; he smiles, heâs going home
Father calls
That star, he smiles, âIâm on my wayâ.
Up the ladder:
A whispered cry
Down the ladder:
He tells me to imagine...
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Posted: December 20, 2005 7:08 PM PST; Last modified: December 20, 2005 7:08 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.2241178 Overall Rank: 4305 Comments:
They saw his light.
That star; he smiles, heâs going home Father calls That star, he smiles, âIâm on my wayâ. Happy Kwanza 242 view(s)
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Some suggestions:
Heartfelt, they watch
Tears of rain.
They stand amazed. (Why change person?)
Continue theyâre gaze.