| Re: Blah Blah by Blindpoetry |
sliver 172.199.242.198 |
19-Dec-05/12:22 AM |
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Your originality is refreshing in this world of mediocrity.
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| Re: The Cowardice of Francis Evans by Caducus |
sliver 172.199.242.198 |
19-Dec-05/12:28 AM |
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I liked the imagery, And I actually pictured hoarfrost in the first stanza.
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| Re: After the Storm by somemorepoetry |
sliver 172.199.242.198 |
19-Dec-05/12:31 AM |
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Why the morbidity? It was going so well.
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| Re: Static by wilco |
sliver 172.199.242.198 |
19-Dec-05/12:33 AM |
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I seem to enjoy everything you write. Another10.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
sliver 172.199.242.198 |
19-Dec-05/12:37 AM |
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perhaps a skin graft would help?
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| Re: To My Love by sliver |
amanda_dcosta 202.83.45.117 |
19-Dec-05/12:52 AM |
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Beautifully written. i wonder who these jerks are who gave you a zero. Heartless, sadists!
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| Re: Prayer For The Church by sliver |
amanda_dcosta 202.83.45.117 |
19-Dec-05/4:59 AM |
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Sliver, do your best
and God will do the rest.
Keep up the good work. (10)
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| Re: To Michelle by ALChemy |
amanda_dcosta 202.83.45.117 |
19-Dec-05/5:08 AM |
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| Re: Just for Show (Suicide revised) by sliver |
amanda_dcosta 202.83.45.117 |
19-Dec-05/6:16 AM |
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spiritually speaking u have it dead right.
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| Re: philosophy of a new age by crazyknight |
amanda_dcosta 202.83.45.117 |
19-Dec-05/6:34 AM |
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I really have to strain to see the light......
Which direction is it coming from?
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| Re: Just for Show (Suicide revised) by sliver |
ALChemy 24.74.101.159 |
19-Dec-05/6:38 AM |
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Proof that you don't have to use 50-syllable words to write a good poem. Reminds me of an old George Jones song... Yabbadabba Doo! The King is gone and so are you..." -10-
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| Re: Mixed Quartet by Dovina |
amanda_dcosta 202.83.45.117 |
19-Dec-05/6:42 AM |
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You sing? a clear idea portrayed. Good.
And yes, we are all of the same race. whether purple, green or orange.
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| Re: philosophy of a new age by crazyknight |
ALChemy 24.74.101.159 |
19-Dec-05/6:46 AM |
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| Re: Mixed Quartet by Dovina |
cyan9 217.40.63.105 |
19-Dec-05/6:53 AM |
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Provocative and very elegant in the 2nd verse. I dont think that this is the best poetry I have read from you, but it conducts a better more interesting experience in a clear manner. If there were anything to improve, perhaps the 1st and second verses could be enrichened in terms of language e.g. geneticists say -> geneticists exclaim in their gatherings, maybe thats not too good, but hopefully you will see what I am driving at.
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| Re: Static by wilco |
ALChemy 24.74.101.159 |
19-Dec-05/7:19 AM |
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How'd the ashes get into the matchbox car?
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| Re: Heaven Help Me by cyan9 |
ALChemy 24.74.101.159 |
19-Dec-05/7:24 AM |
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| Re: Heaven Help Me by cyan9 |
Dovina 209.247.222.94 |
19-Dec-05/7:35 AM |
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I don't know what this is, except that it should probably be called a prose poem, not free verse. Could be a drug trip, or some trauma, an illness. Whatever it is, the human contact at the end is good.
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| Re: Just for Show (Suicide revised) by sliver |
Dovina 69.175.32.104 |
19-Dec-05/1:50 PM |
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I don't see why absolute silence is required, unless the absurd amount of whiskey is a very small amount.
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| Re: Unbroken Horses by Caducus |
Dovina 69.175.32.104 |
19-Dec-05/3:35 PM |
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Very sad, forcefuly told.
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| Re: Returning Home by Niphredil |
Dovina 69.175.32.104 |
19-Dec-05/3:46 PM |
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