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Just for Show (Suicide revised)

Member since 2002 · Posted 18 Dec 2005 · Edited 23 Dec 2005 · 6 comments

Smothered in standard white sheets, Silenced by the voices Of people he wanted to meet. Shutting out the noises On a quiet country lane, Far away from everything So no one heard the bang. No, it wasn't his greatest feat, But when it came to making recompense, He found ways to go too far. If you really want to know, It required absolute silence. A jar of pickles. And an absurd amount of whiskey. P.S. The pickles were just for show.

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[6] amanda_dcosta 19-Dec-05/6:16 AM Reply

spiritually speaking u have it dead right.

[10] ALChemy 19-Dec-05/6:38 AM Reply

Proof that you don't have to use 50-syllable words to write a good poem. Reminds me of an old George Jones song... Yabbadabba Doo! The King is gone and so are you..." -10-

[7] zodiac › ALChemy 22-Dec-05/9:29 AM Reply

Old fashioned girls are fun.

[8] Dovina 19-Dec-05/1:50 PM Reply

I don't see why absolute silence is required, unless the absurd amount of whiskey is a very small amount.

[n/a] sliver › Dovina 23-Dec-05/12:58 AM Reply

Does you get my point better now?

[9] deleted user 23-Dec-05/5:12 PM Reply

Well written--I like sound of it when read aloud.