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Returning Home (Free verse) by Niphredil
silver skeins of muffled cloud crisscross the sky as far as I can see, and the stars are woven in the web like little breaths of air. and it is I alone and the world. still I go on, and stare in wonder as the stars grow larger and larger, and my thoughts ripple fast through my grasping fingers. I stop. I stand motionless beneath the sky, and whirling about me madly, madly the great stars of the night.

Up the ladder: happy birthday
Down the ladder: The years write us

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.6
Weighted score: 5.190725
Overall Rank: 4731
Posted: December 17, 2005 6:18 AM PST; Last modified: December 17, 2005 6:18 AM PST
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[8] Blindpoetry @ 70.172.225.193 | 18-Dec-05/8:30 AM | Reply
might want to take an adjective or and adverd out of second stanza, line 4 - just so there isn't one line poking out like a sword, or a knife. or some other objects.

i enjoyed it
[9] sliver @ 172.199.242.198 | 19-Dec-05/12:13 AM | Reply
I often feel the same way, but not so eloquently.
[7] Dovina @ 69.175.32.104 | 19-Dec-05/3:46 PM | Reply
Great description.
[9] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 | 18-Mar-06/2:55 PM | Reply
Reminds me of Christmas Eve when I was about eleven...a beautiful night, one that felt more enchanted than usual...one of my favourite memories...that's put a smile on my face =D so for that, thank you
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