| Re: Window Washer (midtown) by ecargo |
http://mulberryfairy 64.222.209.137 |
10-Jan-06/8:06 PM |
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mission accomplished- you made a mundane subject into a dance
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| Re: Flow by zodiac |
http://mulberryfairy 64.222.209.137 |
10-Jan-06/8:09 PM |
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beautiful,
nice word choices
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
http://mulberryfairy 64.222.209.137 |
10-Jan-06/8:13 PM |
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I can't tell if you are joking "like the sea you cannot sea"?
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| Re: Suck by MacFrantic |
http://mulberryfairy 64.222.209.137 |
10-Jan-06/8:16 PM |
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whose dirge- I got lost there- she is dead and therefore belied to your aliveness?
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| Re: Tulip by richa |
http://mulberryfairy 64.222.209.137 |
10-Jan-06/8:26 PM |
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seems like you are forcing some words in here for the sake of your meter- the poor tulip boy has poor taste "that" he loves... (for?)(as?)that doesn't seem to be the right definitive article. Ignoring your meter, I would take out the "that" completely, then remove the "ands" in the 3rd and 4th lines.
with neither purse nor name (why so many articles?)
I like the dichotomy of him loving his plot, but being on a wage- puzzling.
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| Re: The chestnut by richa |
http://mulberryfairy 64.222.209.137 |
10-Jan-06/8:30 PM |
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"Dates have become misaligned
or places"
I didn't get the "or places"
The rest is great.
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| Re: the light of a truly bright day by digipoet |
http://mulberryfairy 64.222.209.137 |
10-Jan-06/8:31 PM |
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well done- we had one of those bright days today
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| Re: Comment on Avian 'flu by Stephen Robins |
cyan9 217.40.63.105 |
11-Jan-06/1:16 AM |
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| Re: The copper man and Labrador by Caducus |
pollywolly 62.30.170.78 |
11-Jan-06/7:35 AM |
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really enjoyed this piece. i think you have captured human nature so perfectly and showed it so well in contrast with the love of the pet. very well written.
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| Re: Intestinal Splash by cyan9 |
zodiac 209.193.18.100 |
11-Jan-06/9:32 AM |
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| Re: the sweet smell of death by pollywolly |
daggatolar 212.100.65.5 |
11-Jan-06/9:58 AM |
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only that it leaves us out, the death that in the end ends us is and comes from inside us
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| Re: for one day only by pollywolly |
daggatolar 212.100.65.5 |
11-Jan-06/10:02 AM |
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those who hunger after the sea, can only dream of the land and sand... is this life?
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| Re: Flow by zodiac |
<~> 167.206.181.179 |
11-Jan-06/11:13 AM |
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i liked it then and i likes it now.
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| Re: The Hermit on the Thoroughfare by http://mulberryfairy |
<~> 167.206.181.179 |
11-Jan-06/11:15 AM |
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"mortal pelvis" is an odd combo; how can a pelvis be anything but?
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| Re: cat by Dental Panic |
ecargo 167.219.0.142 |
11-Jan-06/12:40 PM |
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Heh--clever. Fun w/ quantum mechanics! The connection between S's cat and what follows is a little tenuous though.
[Cecil Adams' ("The Straight Dope" author) has a nice little versification of the explanation of Schrodinger's cat, for those who, like me, need a refresher: http://www.straightdope.com/classics/a1_122.html ]
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| Re: the man with the red pendant by pollywolly |
Dovina 17.255.240.6 |
11-Jan-06/1:46 PM |
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Art interpretation carried too far.
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| Re: cat by Dental Panic |
Dovina 17.255.240.6 |
11-Jan-06/1:49 PM |
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It would make a more news-worthy test if you were in that box instead of a cat. Now that would be dental panic.
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| Re: Intestinal Splash by cyan9 |
Dovina 17.255.240.6 |
11-Jan-06/1:54 PM |
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After that dream, I don't need to ask. You had a nice day.
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| Re: The Hermit on the Thoroughfare by http://mulberryfairy |
Dovina 17.255.240.6 |
11-Jan-06/2:01 PM |
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Some commas needed. Using some, implies they're all there, but no, I think.
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| Re: Window Washer (midtown) by ecargo |
Dovina 17.255.240.6 |
11-Jan-06/2:08 PM |
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I saw a flagman once who made a dance of the mundane. It's inspiring - the window washer and your poem.
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