After that dream, I don't need to ask. You had a nice day.

Some commas needed. Using some, implies they're all there, but no, I think.

mission accomplished- you made a mundane subject into a dance

beautiful, nice word choices

I can't tell if you are joking "like the sea you cannot sea"?

really enjoyed this piece. i think you have captured human nature so perfectly and showed it so well in contrast with the love of the pet. very well written.

only that it leaves us out, the death that in the end ends us is and comes from inside us

those who hunger after the sea, can only dream of the land and sand... is this life?

i liked it then and i likes it now.

"mortal pelvis" is an odd combo; how can a pelvis be anything but?

Heh--clever. Fun w/ quantum mechanics! The connection between S's cat and what follows is a little tenuous though. [Cecil Adams' ("The Straight Dope" author) has a nice little versification of the explanation of Schrodinger's cat, for those who, like me, need a refresher: http://www.straightdope.com/classics/a1_122.html ]

I saw a flagman once who made a dance of the mundane. It's inspiring - the window washer and your poem.

Overkill.

Art interpretation carried too far.

It would make a more news-worthy test if you were in that box instead of a cat. Now that would be dental panic.

whose dirge- I got lost there- she is dead and therefore belied to your aliveness?

seems like you are forcing some words in here for the sake of your meter- the poor tulip boy has poor taste "that" he loves... (for?)(as?)that doesn't seem to be the right definitive article. Ignoring your meter, I would take out the "that" completely, then remove the "ands" in the 3rd and 4th lines. with neither purse nor name (why so many articles?) I like the dichotomy of him loving his plot, but being on a wage- puzzling.

"Dates have become misaligned or places" I didn't get the "or places" The rest is great.

well done- we had one of those bright days today

You bastard