Dental Panic
on Valentine 2 by zodiac
16 Feb 2006, 4:31 PM
'then hiked back to the camp
with meat and tin, his knife â the usual things.'
And germs too. "Syphilis, gonorrhea, tubercilosis, and influenza arriving with Captain Cook in 1799, followed by a big typhoid epidemic in 1804 and numerous 'minor'diseases, reduced Hawaii's population from around half a million in 1779 to 84,000 in 1853, the year when smallpox finally reached Hawaii and killed around 10,000 of the survivors."
Sorry, I'm deep into Jared Diamond's 'Guns, Germs and Steel' at the moment.
Somehow made me laugh; in my simple way. I think it's picturing as a kangaroo.
Kangaroos bloody always cheat. Except for when they're playing chicken with cars. They tend not to then, for some reason...
This is awesome, is the person narrating Les Claypool or David Koechner?
This is really good, but I'm only giving you and 8 because people on here are writing too good lately. WE NEED TO RAISE THE EXPECTATIONS HERE, PEOPLE. WE CAN'T GIVE NINES AND TENS TO EVERYBODY, THIBK OF THE INTEGRITY. THE GOD DAMN INTEGRITY.
Her eyes asked me
"will we always be like this"
sums it all up. Soup many have swum in.
And old tear-jerker told well. The last line is not needed, but the rest is - love, that is - needed.
Why is it when our eyes ask, "will we always be like this," his answer sounds like some gull, crying for the leaving tide? Either that, or we hear it in "I'll always love you."
confusion, confusion is there no end to our confusion. man had existed for so long,
we have so much to show for it,
yet why do we get the feeling that we are travelling through a maze...............
A throbbing nimbus of sperm.
This is excellently structured and the content is also of high quality. Stanza III line 7 doesn't quite make sense to me - the Earth appears to be calling the demons 'graves', I must be missing something there. Other than that, I like the imagery.
Last three lines are superb.
This was great fun to read.
Now do some ranking yourself!
Kaolin Fire - what a totally gay name
I thought the double meanings of
"Beams like the door
Pining for forests long gone"
were terrific.
Great imagery; I love the way each successive word adds a little more texture to the poem. -9-
we humans are complicated,
our lives are complicated,
we dont know enough,
but i believe that we must search,
the price may be steep to the man who does it.
but does life have any other meaning.
amassing riches makes no sense, we cant take it.
just existing is useless as time is limited.
we have to search
well done your poem reflects the disillusionment that sets in.
always remember we dont know anything, there is so much to learn.
things that may be true may be false..........
like the 3rd and last line the best, nice.
i absolutely love it. =D
Terrific poem.
Gotta agree about the trimming, especially around:
"You said still had the reek of blood of bulls
And you hated the noise, the tidal roar
Of the populace locked in the ring,
The thirsty cries goading on the blood ballet"
Double use of 'blood' doesn't appeal to me... maybe change one to 'scarlet' or 'crimson'.
But other than that, this is such a lovely poem :-)
Yes, I like this. I'm not sure about 'father-like', it doesn't quite seem to work, other than that, nice!
Amusing, quite witty and good fun.
I'd rather see an alternative to the 'cleverly/severally' rhyme, but that's my only real gripe.