Re: Historical Epic by Bobjim	Ranger 62.252.32.15	16-Feb-06/12:32 PM
Somehow made me laugh; in my simple way. I think it's picturing as a kangaroo. Kangaroos bloody always cheat. Except for when they're playing chicken with cars. They tend not to then, for some reason...
Re: Historical Epic by Bobjim	drnick 24.176.22.254	16-Feb-06/2:05 PM
This is awesome, is the person narrating Les Claypool or David Koechner?
Re: The Gold and silver dress by Caducus	drnick 24.176.22.254	16-Feb-06/2:09 PM
This is really good, but I'm only giving you and 8 because people on here are writing too good lately. WE NEED TO RAISE THE EXPECTATIONS HERE, PEOPLE. WE CAN'T GIVE NINES AND TENS TO EVERYBODY, THIBK OF THE INTEGRITY. THE GOD DAMN INTEGRITY.
Re: The Gold and silver dress by Caducus	Dental Panic 84.27.6.94	16-Feb-06/3:38 PM
Her eyes asked me "will we always be like this" sums it all up. Soup many have swum in.
Re: Together they Fell by Fayt	Dovina 69.175.32.104	16-Feb-06/3:44 PM
And old tear-jerker told well. The last line is not needed, but the rest is - love, that is - needed.
Re: The Gold and silver dress by Caducus	Dovina 69.175.32.104	16-Feb-06/4:23 PM
Why is it when our eyes ask, "will we always be like this," his answer sounds like some gull, crying for the leaving tide? Either that, or we hear it in "I'll always love you."
Re: Valentine 2 by zodiac	Dental Panic 84.27.6.94	16-Feb-06/4:31 PM
'then hiked back to the camp with meat and tin, his knife – the usual things.' And germs too. "Syphilis, gonorrhea, tubercilosis, and influenza arriving with Captain Cook in 1799, followed by a big typhoid epidemic in 1804 and numerous 'minor'diseases, reduced Hawaii's population from around half a million in 1779 to 84,000 in 1853, the year when smallpox finally reached Hawaii and killed around 10,000 of the survivors." Sorry, I'm deep into Jared Diamond's 'Guns, Germs and Steel' at the moment.
Re: A young Man’s Demise by Dovina	crazyknight 202.83.47.151	16-Feb-06/7:40 PM
we humans are complicated, our lives are complicated, we dont know enough, but i believe that we must search, the price may be steep to the man who does it. but does life have any other meaning. amassing riches makes no sense, we cant take it. just existing is useless as time is limited. we have to search well done your poem reflects the disillusionment that sets in. always remember we dont know anything, there is so much to learn. things that may be true may be false..........
Re: Mentally Disabled by drnick	crazyknight 202.83.47.151	16-Feb-06/7:44 PM
confusion, confusion is there no end to our confusion. man had existed for so long, we have so much to show for it, yet why do we get the feeling that we are travelling through a maze...............
Re: Historical Epic by Bobjim	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	17-Feb-06/7:49 AM
A throbbing nimbus of sperm.
Re: Legless Insecurity by PoeticXTC	wEdible Underpantsw 195.157.153.249	17-Feb-06/8:07 AM
Kaolin Fire - what a totally gay name
Re: The cat who would fly by nentwined	drnick 24.176.22.254	17-Feb-06/8:31 AM
like the 3rd and last line the best, nice.
Re: She Doesn't Love Me. by edgar-allen-poe-rox	Fayt 141.157.35.222	17-Feb-06/8:39 AM
i absolutely love it. =D
regarding some deleted poem...	Niphredil 192.117.117.50	17-Feb-06/9:22 AM
Terrific poem. Gotta agree about the trimming, especially around: "You said still had the reek of blood of bulls And you hated the noise, the tidal roar Of the populace locked in the ring, The thirsty cries goading on the blood ballet" Double use of 'blood' doesn't appeal to me... maybe change one to 'scarlet' or 'crimson'. But other than that, this is such a lovely poem :-)
Re: Angst by Mikius	Ranger 62.252.32.15	17-Feb-06/3:21 PM
I sincerely hope this was meant to amuse, because I had to chuckle at it. Knowing you, I think it was!
Re: You Sang To Me In A Cathedral Chamber by Ranger	Niphredil 192.117.117.50	18-Feb-06/9:38 AM
I thought the double meanings of "Beams like the door Pining for forests long gone" were terrific. Great imagery; I love the way each successive word adds a little more texture to the poem. -9-
Re: Gunsong by MacFrantic	Ranger 62.252.32.15	18-Feb-06/1:25 PM
This is excellently structured and the content is also of high quality. Stanza III line 7 doesn't quite make sense to me - the Earth appears to be calling the demons 'graves', I must be missing something there. Other than that, I like the imagery. Last three lines are superb.
regarding some deleted poem...	Ranger 62.252.32.15	18-Feb-06/1:27 PM
This was great fun to read. Now do some ranking yourself!
Re: After a Show at the Lyceum by andrew barnes	Ranger 62.252.32.15	18-Feb-06/1:34 PM
Yes, I like this. I'm not sure about 'father-like', it doesn't quite seem to work, other than that, nice!
Re: FAT BALLET- PAS DE DEUX by andrew barnes	Ranger 62.252.32.15	18-Feb-06/1:35 PM
Amusing, quite witty and good fun. I'd rather see an alternative to the 'cleverly/severally' rhyme, but that's my only real gripe.