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After a Show at the Lyceum

Member since 2005 · Posted 21 May 2005 · 6 comments

Tumbling out of the high Grand Circle, down Waterloo Bridge, arm linking arm. Theatre lights reflecting purple, leaching water-ink to the river's calm. The Thames' cold flow, a deep orchestra pit, dark as the wings. Your hand in my palm. Blind hopes of a first London visit set a great fire in your dazzling eyes. I watch, father-like, revelling in it, but know the flames will fade soon and die. Even now I notice you tire, attention drifting, as a gull on the tide. Back to the hotel, twin beds conspire a first separation, a slight chink in the tabs. You dream other cities and new desires.

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6 comments

[n/a] deleted user 21-May-05/2:13 PM Reply
This is so much nicer than the 'Make a mark' rubbish elsewhere
[8] Dovina 23-May-05/12:24 PM Reply
Nice.
"revelling in it" -> "reveling"
[n/a] andrew barnes › Dovina 24-May-05/12:54 PM Reply
Thanks for positive comment. I did ponder on the spelling of "revelling" but my English dictionary says double L, so I went with that rather than the Americanism of the Microsoft spell check !
[8] Dovina › andrew barnes 24-May-05/12:58 PM Reply
I meant, leave out "in it"
[n/a] andrew barnes › Dovina 24-May-05/1:57 PM Reply
mmmmm.....maybe I'll re-read
[8] Ranger 18-Feb-06/1:34 PM Reply
Yes, I like this. I'm not sure about 'father-like', it doesn't quite seem to work, other than that, nice!