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Legless Insecurity (Free verse) by PoeticXTC
I leg press twice my own weight. Strong legs like solid statues of stone. But sometimes the pressure is too much. The weight on my shoulders overwhelming the strength of the stone and the stone breaks, and crumbles like peanut brittle. My will power shatters like broken glass, forming fragments of insecurities. No one is to blame but me.

Up the ladder: Focus
Down the ladder: H8

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Weighted score: 4.762871
Overall Rank: 11440
Posted: February 4, 2006 6:51 PM PST; Last modified: February 4, 2006 6:51 PM PST
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Comments:
[0] Angelicasassy @ 72.40.4.69 | 5-Feb-06/7:05 PM | Reply
I didn't like this.
[n/a] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 | 6-Feb-06/10:17 AM | Reply
The title led me to expect a more humorous poem. Not to say that it's a bad poem, of course. I'm assuming it's about a bully/jock/whatever kind of idiot you come across every day. Or maybe I'm reading it wrong. Even though it's a bit of a cliche, I liked the way you change direction in line 4; the poem just feels like it needs another couple of lines somewhere.
[n/a] wEdible Underpantsw @ 195.157.153.249 | 17-Feb-06/8:07 AM | Reply
Kaolin Fire - what a totally gay name
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