Last two stanzas are pretty powerful.

Entertaining, though brief.

Hmm, 'To spend perpetu'ty in "pain"' was funny. Liked the play of 'decedent'/'decadent'.

Smartly written, would have preferred lowercase 'electric', but that's the only suggestion.

Great fun to read, the final line is pretty cartoon-y. Plenty to see in only 5 lines; very well written.

Interesting. Is her glorious view of the sky, with the mist obscuring the unnoticed land below, or is it covering the glorious land, which she's trying to see?

Last two lines of stanza 1 are excellent. Was going to say that 'knarled' should be 'gnarled', but it actually works either way. Next time I'll try to be more awake before attempting a critique.

Good work, like MacFrantic I don't think that 'frozen pie' really works for this; for one thing, 'frozen' so soon after 'frost' makes it seem like you were struggling for variation (not something which can be said often about your poetry). The rest is beautiful.

Was there a reason for capitalising 'Cries' and 'Demons'? It's not a criticism, just that neither are proper nouns, and so don't take capitalisation. Unless, of course, there's a purpose which I missed (entirely plausible). Great flow. The opening stanza is a gripper. I think you can get away with using the full 'escapes' (stanza 4, line 3).

Good first verse 'child eating cookies' would have sounded better in my opinion. I like the use of 'weary', to me it doubled as 'wary'. Stanzas two and three work well. Number four lost a little coherence in my reading - 'sleep insom(n)ia'? Also, I wouldn't have split the last line away - '...doesn't wear you out/my lovely independence' is preferable (for me, at least). Still, not bad.

Cool. You might think about changing 'blood lets...' to 'blood letting/Sheer volume deliver/Where failing interest...'. It would keep the original 'blood lets' meaning, while also adding a little more coherence to that passage. As it is, there are three decent yet mostly unconnected lines. Otherwise, good fun.

It'd be nice to see a bit more originality in the rhymes, and less repetition of 'dark'. Be inventive. I actually quite liked the last line though.

Good lines, it has villanelle potential in my opinion. Would've preferred 'winding rain' as it retains the stormy aspect and carries a little more imagery, but you may feel otherwise. Again, I'm not convinced that you need to be specific with 'sixty-one years', but that's just my preference. Well written

Good poem. Bad attitude.

decent ode, but sort of stalled and unconvincing. *6*

Decent enough. No need for the last line though. I think we get it by then.

Th last two lines are great. "I sniff" and "frozen pie" seemed a little off to me. *7*

You and I

'white blue blue sky swirl flash audacity of bird bowing, chortling.' A couple more articles here please.

Very original, very intriguing. I though this was a fantastic endeavor. *10*