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jay (Free verse) by ecargo
The seesaw slide-whistle from the pine pulls me out, white blue blue sky swirl flash audacity of bird bowing, chortling.

Up the ladder: ending
Down the ladder: We Were Burnouts

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Arithmetic Mean: 9.0
Weighted score: 6.0757656
Overall Rank: 1164
Posted: April 13, 2006 6:51 AM PDT; Last modified: April 13, 2006 6:51 AM PDT
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[8] Dovina @ 70.38.78.229 | 13-Apr-06/9:27 AM | Reply
They are audacious!
[9] ALChemy @ 24.74.100.11 | 13-Apr-06/12:08 PM | Reply
The fact that the bird does his bowing so prematurely in the poem(I mean you hardly had time to enjoy him) leads me to think this is a well disguised metaphor for those 2 minute men that women are always talking about. ;D

Are you sure line 4 needs no puntuation?
[9] ALChemy @ 24.74.100.11 > ALChemy | 13-Apr-06/12:10 PM | Reply
-or even "punctuation". Jeez, I can't spell today.
[7] richa @ 81.178.249.71 | 16-Apr-06/2:25 PM | Reply
'white blue blue
sky swirl flash audacity
of bird bowing, chortling.'

A couple more articles here please.
[9] Ranger @ 86.131.54.123 | 17-Apr-06/2:10 AM | Reply
Great fun to read, the final line is pretty cartoon-y. Plenty to see in only 5 lines; very well written.
[n/a] ecargo @ 167.219.88.140 | 17-Apr-06/1:50 PM | Reply
Pulitzer (announced today) for poetry goes to Claudia Emerson for _Late Wife,_ - "Epistolary poems about losing love and finding it again." http://www.nytimes.com/ref/arts/pulitzers2006.html (registration required)

Three poems by Emerson for anyone curious about what Pulitzer Prize winning poetry looks like: http://www.poems.com/threeeme.htm
[n/a] ecargo @ 167.219.88.140 | 17-Apr-06/1:54 PM | Reply
Math poem fans: "Gregory K. Pincus, a screenwriter and aspiring children's book author . . . wrote a post on his GottaBook blog (gottabook.blogspot.com) two weeks ago inviting readers to write "Fibs," six-line poems that used a mathematical progression known as the Fibonacci sequence to dictate the number of syllables in each line. Then, last Friday, . . . slashdot.org . . . linked to Mr. Pincus's original post, and suddenly, it seemed, Fibs were sprouting all over the Internet."

Story here: http://www.nytimes.com/2006/04/14/books/14fibo.html?ex=1145419200&en=e0ccb44acd92493d&ei=5087%0A


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