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jay (Free verse) by ecargo The seesaw slide-whistle
from the pine pulls
me out, white blue blue
sky swirl flash audacity
of bird bowing, chortling.
Up the ladder:
ending
Down the ladder:
Mallard
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Posted: April 13, 2006 6:51 AM PDT; Last modified: April 13, 2006 6:51 AM PDTWeighted score: 6.0757656 Overall Rank: 1164 Comments:
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Dovina @ 70.38.78.229
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13-Apr-06/9:27 AM
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They are audacious!
The fact that the bird does his bowing so prematurely in the poem(I mean you hardly had time to enjoy him) leads me to think this is a well disguised metaphor for those 2 minute men that women are always talking about. ;D
Are you sure line 4 needs no puntuation?
-or even "punctuation". Jeez, I can't spell today.
'white blue blue
sky swirl flash audacity of bird bowing, chortling.' A couple more articles here please.
Great fun to read, the final line is pretty cartoon-y. Plenty to see in only 5 lines; very well written.
Pulitzer (announced today) for poetry goes to Claudia Emerson for _Late Wife,_ - "Epistolary poems about losing love and finding it again." http://www.nytimes.com/ref/arts/pulitzer
Three poems by Emerson for anyone curious about what Pulitzer Prize winning poetry looks like: http://www.poems.com/threeeme.htm
Math poem fans: "Gregory K. Pincus, a screenwriter and aspiring children's book author . . . wrote a post on his GottaBook blog (gottabook.blogspot.com) two weeks ago inviting readers to write "Fibs," six-line poems that used a mathematical progression known as the Fibonacci sequence to dictate the number of syllables in each line. Then, last Friday, . . . slashdot.org . . . linked to Mr. Pincus's original post, and suddenly, it seemed, Fibs were sprouting all over the Internet."
Story here: http://www.nytimes.com/2006/04/14/books/ 281 view(s)
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