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jay (Free verse) by ecargo

The seesaw slide-whistle from the pine pulls me out, white blue blue sky swirl flash audacity of bird bowing, chortling.

ALChemy 13-Apr-06/12:08 PM
The fact that the bird does his bowing so prematurely in the poem(I mean you hardly had time to enjoy him) leads me to think this is a well disguised metaphor for those 2 minute men that women are always talking about. ;D

Are you sure line 4 needs no puntuation?




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