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greymo(u)rn (Free verse) by lmp
pigeons fly across the brick paved plaza.
the lampposts, some leaning, stand sentry,
although their light has long since gone dormant.
the dull grey scud across the sky lowers,
ominously bearing down upon
the squat dun-coloured buildings.
awkward spaces are sparsely poulated
with awkward people.
it was better before the fog burned off;
at least the mystery of what may be hidden
within was appealing.
earlier, the dog and i took our morning walk.
opening the door to the side yard revealed
a dimly lit space between the two houses.
although the area is broad and deep,
the density of the morning mist
did not allow the sun to cast light;
neither were there shadows.
the late winter grass was further drabbed
by the slight amount of frost upon
its dry brown blades.
the whole draining of colour
allowed the grey trees, stretching
their empty knarled fingers to the leaden sky,
to meld into one whole, indistinguishable
from the morning shroud.
the longing for the sea and sand
on mornings like this is strong indeed.
to feel the wrappings of the fogbank,
more dense and without objects
disturbing its continuity,
is to feel both safe and vulnerable:
the fog can only obscure.
the sense of enclosure within the nebulousness
is akin to some minor deprivation of the senses,
a greyness drawn over them,
directing the focus inward...
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Arithmetic Mean: 5.3333335
Weighted score: 5.0397344
Overall Rank: 7084
Posted: January 5, 2006 4:06 PM PST; Last modified: April 14, 2006 3:41 PM PDT
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I see no reason for not introducing a Short Story category, under 500 words.
I thought it was a good idea you had to swap the text layout styles. It's also a good way to find qualities and flaws in your poem you may not have noticed before.
God, my vocabulary is weak today for some reason.