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Strangers in a foreign land (Free verse) by luzrheroguy
The battle was over And blood laid scattered Along the stretch of the street But all of that was behind us now Victorious over death, and death alone We were the soldiers, That might make it home The buildings were dead Some still soaked in flames Strangers in a foreign land We knew not the words The survivors screamed As they saw the damage done Nothing we could do We marched on ahead Surrounded by an army Of a thousand falling tears Sadness in our souls A soldier does as he is told We neared the edge Of this ruined village When a child began to walk to us A scared little girl With tears in her 6 year old eyes She wasn't ready to die But a bomb was strapped to her chest And her daddy was firm God will only let you into heaven If you walk up to them She paused a moment to look back Before running off to attack She made it six feet from us Before she too added to the stain Left upon this foreign soil I wonder if there will ever be Enough tears in the world To wash away the blood Left by strangers In this foreign land

Up the ladder: Mystery Stranger
Down the ladder: Sun (Pantoum)

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.9525743
Overall Rank: 8770
Posted: April 14, 2006 12:39 PM PDT; Last modified: April 14, 2006 12:39 PM PDT
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[8] Ranger @ 86.131.54.123 | 17-Apr-06/2:04 AM | Reply
Last two stanzas are pretty powerful.
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