I like the way that there is no punctuation-gives sense of the futile nature of the slave's life. 9

horus8 - seriously, do you kiss your mother with that mouth? You lost my interest in whether or not your opinion really matters, and whether you truly have something useful and possibly educating to contribute at the beginning of the second line - the rest was just garbage. Don't just critique to hear your own voice float around between your ears - if you have something useful to say, by all means, lets hear it. Otherwise, save the bs for those who haven't been published..

All green.

I liked this - the possibility that your child was destined to be yours. Sometimes it's hard to remember that in the midst of math homework that they just don't understand (and, in their opinion, never will). Hold onto that beauty - as they grow, somedays it's all you've got...

Very moving - excellent metaphors. A truly touching poem - 10

beauty, eh

Nifty. But I don't get "he probed my poll". I'm sure its just me.

what did you delete?

i wonder where u got "it was . . ." from? *cough**there was...**cough*

is poemranker confused? or has some fusible link fried?

I would take them to court and sue them both for a divorce. You know, that's a real option by the way. I have friends that have done it at your age. If you can prove that they are both incompitent, and have your worst interests in mind, and only their selfish shit lives in mind. you'll win. Because you've got a job with dave to support yourself here, plus me and Nadine, and Bills Giving you a free ride to Crossroads private bording school. The judge would let you live with me, and you could finish your education without having to be subject to your parents misery, addictive violent behaviour patterns, and extreme immaturity. Because, trust me when I say "their misery" young one, as far as I'm concerned? Has just begun. Everyone on this planet deserve an opportunity to have a normal stable education, and home life. to not be able to provide a child with even that? Is Criminal, and hell hath no equal to a child scorned.

Brazen.

Hilarious, a tad long, but great.

why!?

uhm...

syllabyleistic are we?

<BR> yourself into a coma

Wow Sliver! That is THY best poem i have ever heard! I don't agree with the point system either, but i will state it simpler then Rockmage-- it should go to one million. You said my poem deserves 1000, and it describes him well - this deserves 1 million.... awesome poem----- 10/10

cute

24 tuckers me out!