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on some deleted poem
19 Nov 2003, 4:46 PM
A symphony! An Opera!
Very Powerful. Your hammer works wonderfully. Pounds right through.
Interesting, Joe Gould?
lol. funny poem, ah here's a correction,
"you think from your problems your freed" you are?
A truly pathetic sentiment! 10!
Sounds like your common theme.
Kickers and tweet tweets.
Have you read my Sestinas? They're splendid, as splendid as an exploding parrot, and foreign dogfood.
there is some quite excellent language in there, and the ending is gracefully delivered from the previous stanza's full-on self-conscious flow.
I'd like to see some of the descriptiveness trimmed [weeded?] out, but hesitant for the risk of loosing the feeling of dreamlike recollection/fantasy this brings. For example, "we walk...", "we scrawl..." - might be worth a look, dunno.
I like it better than the "5" at the bottom -
-8.5- so I'll round up.
Monster? You? Your'e kidding right?
Could that possibly be horus, being NICE? no, my feeble eyes decieve me I'm sure. WHATS UP KATZ, I see he got his own.
how is it that you can put on seven poems in a row and everyone else can only put three on a week?
Great, Praise Jesus!
ok a little streached but
it was a good read.
cheer 0
ok a little streached but
it was a good read.
cheer 0
have u been to hawaii?
atta boy...er lucy girl? very alive.
:o)
only THOR can lift hes hammer...so you little GOD you, hammer away, your brilliant poetry. You are AWESOME. Horses like apples and sugar cubes that will sidetrack them of your minitaur's? er.. back{ wink}
:o)