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Theology (Free verse) by dougsoderstrom
Theology O perfect kingdom, Ancient womb of our souls, Born out of love, And nurtured by “the giver of life,” Ignorant, innocent, unwitting, and unclothed, Yet protected from every single stain, Spotless---- no blemish to be found, But without even a wisp of its own breath, A mere reflection of “a much greater part,” Born without choice, Forced to be a part of Eden. And then an alien voice---- an archaic sound, A Luciferian call “to know,” An offer to be set free----- to be loosed from “all restraint,” A cerebral gift for thought, The capacity to choose for one’s self, An “original sin,” An urge to leave one’s home, No condemnation, neither even expelled, Just “a simple leaving,” A “Prodigal Choice,” A dauntless resolution, A decision to become a human being. Two separate beings------- an Adam and an Eve, A ying and a yang, Polar opposites----- pulled together like North to South, An inevitable merger, conjoined at the hip---- “belly to belly,” By a force much greater than life itself, A need to procreate, to extend one’s life, A search for immortality, An excuse, a weakness, an Achilles’ Heel, A passion to taste of “The Tree’s first fruit,” An earthly misadventure----a coital error, An orgasmic entrance into life itself, Leaving “the kingdom” from whence one came. The miracle of two seeds having become one, New life----- one more soul added to the vastness of mankind, Yet, in the twinkling of an eye, The child becomes a man, Never knowing why he is here, Why he has been allowed to “run rampant upon the earth,” Did he forget, Or is it that he did not want to know, That everyone is a Prodigal Son----- that each has ventured far from home, That all “are lost,” that each of us is adrift in “a common sea,” That every man, and women, and child is doomed, that there is no way out, Except that we find the “only way of escape,” Salvation----- namely, the choice to become “a man of sorrows,” A realization that this is truly “a land of sadness,” a place we no longer wish to be, That there be a choice to leave, A resolute rejection of all that constitutes “the world of man,” That we long to be crucified, that we yearn for a way of release, that we cry out to be delivered, That we learn that death is not to be feared, that it is not an enemy, But rather a friend, an ally, a passageway---- an unlocked door, One that must be opened in order for us to go back home.

Up the ladder: Drug Dealer
Down the ladder: Sacrificial Sanity

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.5882354
Weighted score: 3.7565217
Overall Rank: 13520
Posted: May 23, 2003 12:14 PM PDT; Last modified: May 23, 2003 12:14 PM PDT
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-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.

Comments:
[0] JackCrawley @ 168.9.250.34 | 23-May-03/2:11 PM | Reply
Stop telling everyone, everywhere, to read this. It's atrociously bad.
[n/a] <~> @ 64.252.90.210 > JackCrawley | 25-May-03/9:58 PM | Reply
yeah, well at least he got wanked for it
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > <~> | 26-May-03/7:38 AM | Reply
Have you gone off to the land of mature poetes where you and god'swife and poetandknowit frolic in fields of delightful maturity?
[n/a] <~> @ 64.252.90.210 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 26-May-03/8:09 AM | Reply
no. i have not gone anyhere. i have withdrawn. settle made a terrible mess of his scree, and i blame myself. i am moving to africa.
[n/a] dmzoacan @ 68.14.26.239 > <~> | 28-May-03/6:47 PM | Reply
Hey fuck you Settle brought joy and laughter to us all. HE TOTALLY DID. HOW FUCKING DARE YOU!!!!!!!1
[n/a] dmzoacan @ 68.14.26.239 > <~> | 28-May-03/6:49 PM | Reply
P.S. according to Richard Pryor, africa is full of niggers. SO WATCH OUT!
[n/a] <~> @ 64.252.90.210 > dmzoacan | 28-May-03/7:21 PM | Reply
rut-roh. the N-word.
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 23-May-03/2:20 PM | Reply
You've succeeded in avoiding every theological philosophy straight down the board. Good Job! What exactly were you attempting to clarify with this piece doug? Proof you're asleep while you're awake?
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.8.96 | 23-May-03/3:17 PM | Reply
[n/a] wCUNTw @ 195.157.153.253 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 24-May-03/8:07 AM | Reply
Read my new poem ("Doug Soderstrom")----it's a WINNER!
[0] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 | 23-May-03/6:57 PM | Reply
Aren't you a little short for a stormtrooper?
[0] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 | 23-May-03/6:57 PM | Reply
For spamming I give you a zero. And I didn't read your poem either.
[0] wEdible Underpantsw @ 195.157.153.253 | 24-May-03/7:37 AM | Reply
Interesting. Perhaps you could write a poem about how people attempt to explain the "salvation versus works" dilemma. The dilemma is stark. Religious fundamentalists, it seems, repeatedly fail in explaining why unsaved people should go to Hell, whilst Christian Humanists attempt to explain why unsaved people should not go to Hell. The poem could also deal with how the religious fundamentalist copes with the cognitive dissonance which seems such an inherent part of this dilemma. In my view, the cognitive dissonance may well be an inherent part of trying to rationally justify why one who has lived a life of moral excellence, yet who is unsaved, should be expected to spend an eternity in Hell. What do you think?
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 | 24-May-03/1:39 PM | Reply
Why did you suddenly flip?

Your friend,
--Doug
[1] Felzpoet @ 68.173.204.214 | 24-May-03/5:39 PM | Reply
Dude give up tht sucked i couldnt even finish readin it
[10] bondjedi @ 12.228.21.93 | 25-May-03/1:37 PM | Reply
this is a great poem - not! I suspect you are writing bad poems on purpose to receive recognition, of a sort, on the bottom 15. you get a ten.
[n/a] daniella @ 200.68.202.74 | 4-Jun-03/9:43 PM | Reply
God hath given you one face and you make an ass of it
[n/a] Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.126.113.154 > daniella | 4-Jun-03/9:46 PM | Reply
I'm sorry, I just had to let you know, that this comment made me chirp out loud.

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that's me on the bottom of the page, tell my mom!
[5] deleted user @ 66.75.214.103 | 11-Jun-03/11:16 AM | Reply
Long. Mr. Soderstrom, I am sorry to say, your poem is entirely too long. Also, I agree with Bachus. However, I don't even think I could write THAT much poetry, good, bad or otherwise, so I give you a 5 (I suspect that it took that many minutes to type). Try shortening it, and using less quotes and hypens.
[n/a] Nicholas Jones @ 137.44.1.200 | 20-Jun-03/6:56 AM | Reply
Doug, come back. This reminds me a little in style of the mighty Hugh MacDiarmid, although not in content (he was a militant communist). It is a densely packed, intelligent poem, desperately striving against its own limitations to find salvation. Needs more work, but well done.
[n/a] dougsoderstrom @ 207.80.112.1 > Nicholas Jones | 20-Jun-03/7:16 AM | Reply
Dear Nicholas:

How are you doing? For me anyway things seem to be going quite well.

Your comments concerning your wish that I keep writing poetry on "poemranker," I really prefer not to do so because there are so many individuals on this website who are primarily out to degradate others attempts to "do their best" at writing poetry. At first I thought that it was kind of fuuny and I enjoyed debating them. But as time went on so many of their comments just became a kind of "pain in the ass."

However, if you would like to ever communicate with me in the future feel free to e-mail me at dougsod@wcjc.cc.tx.us-------.

The best to you, and thanks again for your very thoughtful comments.

Your Friend,

Doug
[10] smlink84 @ 68.98.150.99 | 19-Nov-03/9:12 PM | Reply
Great, Praise Jesus!
[0] Sing4Jesus! @ 87.80.134.60 | 23-Aug-06/9:51 AM | Reply
Jesus thinks this is longwinded SHITE!
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