This is MUCH better. Is this a new one that you wrote?

good poem, i wish them well as well

I really liked this...It's good!

This is great! hehe. Definately my kind of poem! ~10~

This is waaay too much like the lines from the movie Ten Things I Hate About You!!!!

There is so much more that could have been displayed here. It seems you focus your words like a bullet, but you limit the meaning by using a weak hand gun. he gained an enemy, Lost a love, and destroyed himself All in the same day Oh yeah, I do understand. Those lines are beautiful. I have. March 7th 2004. -9-

You never cease to amaze.

hmmm... seems a little lacking of... Something... Like substance, not so much depth more... purpose or drive, but I'm looking for a better word... Damn it. Someone able to help me figure what this lacks? No vote for now.

Allow your eye to do the only bleeding you cause yourself. Tears work so much better... Trust me I know... I almost married a "cutter" -8-

Saddism, bad. Pimple/Lyrics(Hint: what this really is) need work. Way too much focus on ryhme. emotion, worked it up but not in any interestingly new style. -4-

beautifully expression.

Matter Piece. Absolute Matter!!! -9-

Welcome to Hell's Kitchen

lol

touching... really...

Very Steve Martin monologue, "Cruel Shoes'-esque. Well done *9*

O yer so youv seen ROOTS as well. 6/10 for observation.

A fresh thought well said.

I'll give you a ten as a prize for the most vote self-inflation on record

I like the part about the nipple clamps though