Bachus
on some deleted poem
22 May 2004, 7:56 PM
Funny at times.
sounds good to me
glad to see your poetry again
I never new you were so good at this... and all this time I thought you were a poser like me... 10 for everything...
This is amazing... you must really know what its like to be in love when noone understands you... you put it so perfectly... dont listen to what anyone else tells you, you have a gift and you should never stop writing... 10...
I can't decide if this is about schizophrenia or OCD (both maybe?). At any rate, you seem to have a pretty good grasp of mental disorders...I'm guessing you either have one yourself or know someone who does. This isn't the first one of yours I've read dealing with this subject. Anyway, it's not bad.
strange creatures, cicadas.
Thank you, Hostileintent, for that anonymous retaliatory Zero. Changing computers doesen't hide the fact that you're still in the SAME BUILDING's IP domain
Yep, thats a good one; good use of the form.
Consider replacing "Walking", it's implied and the space could be better used to express the mood.
the wine/mine rhyme, btw is a good coupling and the long "i" sounds work well.
when you say "contemplating a swift descent" are you implying she will go down [on you] quickly (or vice versa), or are you saying something will be leaving soon and quickly?
Good form Sasha. I like the topic too - they are strange birds, someone was telling me about them just this week.
hey ed, not bad, not bad at all - I'm not crazy about a rhyming cinquain tho.
You must be un-insane to write this. Country or "Yanni-esue?"
Excellent.
some deleted user
on some deleted poem
22 May 2004, 1:26 PM
A moving family memoir with a beautiful juxtaposition of swollen balls and prisonerâs release. Ace, tops, and cigar.
A charming take on Our Favorite Midget.
A charming variation on Our Favorite Midget.
and what is this supposed to be??
I had to look up DVDA. I have to say.