regarding some deleted poem...	8-Sep-05/1:06 PM
#1 - Although the word hollered is quite an amusing word and used quite frequesntly in conversation here in the South, I don't believe it has any place in poetry...except that My Morning Jacket song...thats good stuff... #2 - I think it just needs some more work. Make it interseting to read...make me actually think about whats going on.
Re: keys by ay deee	8-Sep-05/1:10 PM
Oooo! Oooo! You're a janitor! I love this game...
Re: Artemis and the Rain by MacFrantic	13-Sep-05/6:51 PM
Your poems always give me a headache.
Re: Radio Tele Libre Mille Collines by Muffinly	13-Sep-05/7:30 PM
Baxter, you know I don't speak Spanish. Seriusly, though, you've got some solid stuff here. I think you could do without the second stanza and cut the first down to about half the lines and this'll be pretty damn good.
Re: June by Muffinly	13-Sep-05/7:31 PM
Once again, you could probably say this in about half the lines and it's actually be more effective.
Re: August by Muffinly	13-Sep-05/7:33 PM
mmm...not as good as the first one I read...not terrible, just doesn't make me jump up and say halle-fucking-luja (which really wouldn't be that hard right now cause I've got an 18 pack of High Life and the George Strait Box Set.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Sep-05/7:38 PM
Sorry, I just couldn't get through this (length can be a virtue as in Zin/Enough/Squeeze/Things/Flow or a downfall like most of the other long poems on this site. Work on getting this down to a readable length and we'll talk..maybe I'll try again tomorrow, but I'm too tired and too drunk to try right now.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Sep-05/7:40 PM
Sorry, I just can't like it right now. Too much rhyme and not enough reason.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Sep-05/7:43 PM
I actualy rather like this, escept for the dread one.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Sep-05/7:45 PM
See, just when I like something you wrote, I read this one and ruin it.
Re: the birds are bugs by ay deee	13-Sep-05/7:56 PM
Locusts do suck. I do, however, think that a much better job could be do of saying that here...
Re: to all of you by Heather Dee	13-Sep-05/8:03 PM
That's the idea. Don't give a fuck.... about the people who are just being an ass. If you're not going to give a fuck about writing, then why try. I wrote on one of your posts, what felt like a constructive bit...no idea if you even read it though..but seriously...actually work to get better...don't just post any old bit of shit that you write...it's what so many people here do and it's quite annoying. The point, though, is that a few souls have brushed off the tacky shit, taken the constructive criticism and actually improved their writing...it's rare, but it happens. Take Cuddlytiger17....she's no Poe, but she's improved (and to be honest I don't even know if she still posts here, but it's just the first one that came to mind...so...). I'm not gonna vote on this because it seems more like just a last ditch effort to get a point accross than a poem. Here's the best advice I can give you though (and being 26, you probably already know it becaue that's the same age I am and I know it): Assholes are going to keep being assholes, no matter what you say or do...even on the Poemeranker.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Sep-05/8:05 PM
Yesterday, someone broke into my neighbors house, took some jewelry and beat their pug to death with a crowbar. I don't know why, but this just made me think of that.
regarding some deleted poem...	13-Sep-05/8:22 PM
Not your best, but I'll take it..
Re: Creation by Quarton	14-Sep-05/3:03 PM
eventually This seems more like a science textbook put to rhyme than a poem...give it some feeling.
Re: Seekers by Dovina	14-Sep-05/3:06 PM
I'd love to see you post that one from a while back...I don't remember what it was called but it was really good...something about being in fashion...I don't know....get on that, though ok?
Re: A Barefoot Day in the Park by Dovina	29-Sep-05/9:40 PM
too much wisdom for his age...mmmhhmmmm....it's like they're just popping out knowing everything these days. I like the first half of both stanzas but i think the end could use a little tweak.
Re: pep talk by ay deee	29-Sep-05/9:43 PM
I'd lose everything after rich red thread and maybe everything after hairy shirt.
Re: A Meadow, Among Other Things by Enkidu	29-Sep-05/9:45 PM
I can't say I entirely get whats going on here, but it has me intrigued enough to read it when I'm dully awake.
Re: The regrets made me voids by Prince of Void	29-Sep-05/10:01 PM
this just doesnt make much sense....