on Artemis and the Rain by MacFrantic
13 Sep 2005, 6:51 PM
Your poems always give me a headache.
on Radio Tele Libre Mille Collines by Muffinly
13 Sep 2005, 7:30 PM
Baxter, you know I don't speak Spanish.
Seriusly, though, you've got some solid stuff here. I think you could do without the second stanza and cut the first down to about half the lines and this'll be pretty damn good.
Seriusly, though, you've got some solid stuff here. I think you could do without the second stanza and cut the first down to about half the lines and this'll be pretty damn good.
on some deleted poem
13 Sep 2005, 7:38 PM
Sorry, I just couldn't get through this (length can be a virtue as in Zin/Enough/Squeeze/Things/Flow or a downfall like most of the other long poems on this site. Work on getting this down to a readable length and we'll talk..maybe I'll try again tomorrow, but I'm too tired and too drunk to try right now.
on some deleted poem
13 Sep 2005, 7:40 PM
Sorry, I just can't like it right now. Too much rhyme and not enough reason.
on some deleted poem
13 Sep 2005, 7:43 PM
I actualy rather like this, escept for the dread one.
on some deleted poem
13 Sep 2005, 7:45 PM
See, just when I like something you wrote, I read this one and ruin it.
on the birds are bugs by ay deee
13 Sep 2005, 7:56 PM
Locusts do suck. I do, however, think that a much better job could be do of saying that here...
on to all of you by Heather Dee
13 Sep 2005, 8:03 PM
That's the idea. Don't give a fuck....
about the people who are just being an ass. If you're not going to give a fuck about writing, then why try. I wrote on one of your posts, what felt like a constructive bit...no idea if you even read it though..but seriously...actually work to get better...don't just post any old bit of shit that you write...it's what so many people here do and it's quite annoying.
The point, though, is that a few souls have brushed off the tacky shit, taken the constructive criticism and actually improved their writing...it's rare, but it happens. Take Cuddlytiger17....she's no Poe, but she's improved (and to be honest I don't even know if she still posts here, but it's just the first one that came to mind...so...).
I'm not gonna vote on this because it seems more like just a last ditch effort to get a point accross than a poem.
Here's the best advice I can give you though (and being 26, you probably already know it becaue that's the same age I am and I know it): Assholes are going to keep being assholes, no matter what you say or do...even on the Poemeranker.
about the people who are just being an ass. If you're not going to give a fuck about writing, then why try. I wrote on one of your posts, what felt like a constructive bit...no idea if you even read it though..but seriously...actually work to get better...don't just post any old bit of shit that you write...it's what so many people here do and it's quite annoying.
The point, though, is that a few souls have brushed off the tacky shit, taken the constructive criticism and actually improved their writing...it's rare, but it happens. Take Cuddlytiger17....she's no Poe, but she's improved (and to be honest I don't even know if she still posts here, but it's just the first one that came to mind...so...).
I'm not gonna vote on this because it seems more like just a last ditch effort to get a point accross than a poem.
Here's the best advice I can give you though (and being 26, you probably already know it becaue that's the same age I am and I know it): Assholes are going to keep being assholes, no matter what you say or do...even on the Poemeranker.
on some deleted poem
13 Sep 2005, 8:05 PM
Yesterday, someone broke into my neighbors house, took some jewelry and beat their pug to death with a crowbar.
I don't know why, but this just made me think of that.
I don't know why, but this just made me think of that.
on some deleted poem
13 Sep 2005, 8:22 PM
Not your best, but I'll take it..
on A Barefoot Day in the Park by Dovina
29 Sep 2005, 9:40 PM
too much wisdom for his age...mmmhhmmmm....it's like they're just popping out knowing everything these days.
I like the first half of both stanzas but i think the end could use a little tweak.
I like the first half of both stanzas but i think the end could use a little tweak.
on A Meadow, Among Other Things by Enkidu
29 Sep 2005, 9:45 PM
I can't say I entirely get whats going on here, but it has me intrigued enough to read it when I'm dully awake.
on The regrets made me voids by Prince of Void
29 Sep 2005, 10:01 PM
this just doesnt make much sense....
#2 - I think it just needs some more work. Make it interseting to read...make me actually think about whats going on.