| Re: Up The Road Aways by harrytuttle |
2-Oct-02/1:42 PM |
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And your point is? There's some nice wording in places; 'slinging slugs of muck to the wind' is lovely, but the ending is cliched and dull. Have a 4, as an encouragement for future efforts.
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| Re: Drug Dealer by Bazilla |
2-Oct-02/1:46 PM |
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A Beatles fan are we? 0. Your imagination appears to have been stunted at birth.
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| Re: Why? by martysmiles |
2-Oct-02/1:52 PM |
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Perhaps people stare, say mean things and do all the other actions mentioned in your poem because your poetry is so bad. Have you ever considered that? Hmmm? You score 0.
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| Re: Birth by nentwined |
2-Oct-02/2:00 PM |
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Nice, apart from the final line. 8. It's a little bit flat. 72 anonymous votes of 10 though? Marking your own work only cheats yourself. And makes you appear lonely. Don't stoop that low.
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| Re: Weep for Dead Heroes by Tascobar |
9-Oct-02/3:23 AM |
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Succinctly put. 7. I like the title and particularly the rhyming of the first and second lines; rare to see in a haiku.
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| Re: Weep for Dead Heroes by Tascobar |
9-Oct-02/3:23 AM |
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Succinctly put. 7. I like the title and particularly the rhyming of the first and second lines; rare to see in a haiku.
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| Re: I don't fit in by devina |
9-Oct-02/3:30 AM |
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Woeful. 0. If I had a pound for every outpouring of teenage angst that I've read on this site, I'd be a very rich man. There's nothing particularly wrong with your words apart from being a masterclass in how to write dull cliches, but PLEASE change the subject matter and stop sounding so whiny and pathetic. Look up unoriginal in the dictionary, and this poem would be there. I am offended to my core.
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| Re: Sisters of mercy by strider1 |
9-Oct-02/11:48 AM |
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Highly pretentious. 2. You fail to engage me at all, and I would personally welcome it if you too went 'headlong into this deep dark pit' that you mention and never emerge again. Also, for an individual so obsessed with commas, surely you know that 'deep dark pit' should be 'deep, dark pit' due to the placement of two adjectives side by side?
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
9-Oct-02/11:50 AM |
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Very good. 8. The poem has a powerful rhythm and is very evocative.
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| Re: Angels by Reuben Spiteri |
9-Oct-02/11:55 AM |
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You've got a great name, Reuben Spiteri; almost as good as mine. Unfortunately, this poem is far from great. 2. There is nothing here to stir any kind of emotion in me. Bland as bland can be.
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9-Oct-02/11:58 AM |
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I liked this initially, but I think only due to the humourous repetition of 'bum'. By the third reading, it grates a little. 4.
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| Re: A Soldier's Promise by Ninoy_Instigator |
9-Oct-02/2:49 PM |
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The idea of your poem is interesting, if not incredibly politically incorrect, but your execution is very poor. 1. Written with a clumsy hand, and the final line simply stinks.
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| Re: The First Poem by jrtails |
9-Oct-02/2:59 PM |
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Simple but effective. 8. I like it.
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| Re: Two Towers by Tascobar |
14-Oct-02/5:23 AM |
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I think you have opened a can of worms here. Dangerously offensive, but then I like work which challenges the stereotype of acceptableness. 7, for sheer bravado.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
14-Oct-02/5:27 AM |
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Staid and boring. I had the time of my life at university, but you inject all the enthusiasm of a twenty-year prison stretch into this poem. I appreciate you're telling us you'd rather be out of the education system, but you don't do it well. 3.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
14-Oct-02/5:32 AM |
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I don't like this one little bit. 1.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
23-Oct-02/1:34 PM |
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Cease your preaching and use your newly found spare time writing much better poetry than this please. You state the obvious, badly. 0.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
23-Oct-02/1:45 PM |
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Nicely finished, but the piece as a whole is blunt. 5. Your language is not evocative enough to truly engage the reader and force them to empathise with you.
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| Re: The shirt I wore to dinner. by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
4-Feb-03/6:50 AM |
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Utter shite. 1. You attempt to shock, but just leave me cold, safe in the knowledge I have discovered yet another dumb Yank.
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| Re: The Considerate Lover by Tascobar |
4-Feb-03/6:54 AM |
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