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Up The Road Aways (Free verse) by harrytuttle Walking the hollow, simple world
I balk at the thought of a cereal breakfast
In a cardboard box of time
I sit slinging slugs of muck
to the wind
and thinking about something
I forgot long ago
Before things mangled themselves
And time stood still.
But trudge on we must
Thru the gloomy night
Into the too bright dawn
Up the ladder:
None
Down the ladder:
opposition
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Posted: September 26, 2002 7:24 PM PDT; Last modified: September 26, 2002 7:24 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.45 Overall Rank: 12895 Comments:
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27-Sep-02/4:28 AM
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I yearn for simpler times too. Thanks for reminding me where my watch is.
And your point is? There's some nice wording in places; 'slinging slugs of muck to the wind' is lovely, but the ending is cliched and dull. Have a 4, as an encouragement for future efforts.
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