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None (Free verse) by poemreader They don't deserve this
They are way too young
Two of four children
Including me as one
It wasn't supposed to be this way for them
They were to have a better life
And all because of one person
They will never have that life
I miss them and love them so very much
I would do anything and everything for them
They are my two biggest buddies
And will always be there for me till the end
They'll always be my brothers
No matter what people say
No one can take my place ever
I love them in each and every way.
Up the ladder:
My Sun
Down the ladder:
Up The Road Aways
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 3.9
Posted: September 10, 2002 11:47 AM PDT; Last modified: September 10, 2002 11:47 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.45 Overall Rank: 12889 Comments:
Seems a little confused and confusing-have another go and see if you can understand it first !
=)
Which ways would that be?? By the way it's obviously your fault.
It feels like u've just read a story in my life..
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The actual rhythm of the poem I find overly halting, stopstarting, and repetitive -- it drones.
I'm left mildly curious as to what's happened to or with them.