Re: One by ben	29-Aug-02/5:18 AM
It's a tad too depressing for my tastes, but you manage to convey the sense of loneliness without resorting to the any of the cliched stereotypes like 'darkness', etc, and so for that I gives you a 7. I look forward to more.
Re: The green mile by Ming T. Merciless	8-Sep-02/9:26 AM
This is much more a statement than a poem. You strike me as someone attempting to be arty and intelligent, but sadly lack the necessary brains to do so. Have a 1.
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Sep-02/9:37 AM
I began reading this with a great degree of trepidation as the poem initially appeared to be written by someone with a vested interest in cliches, but by the end I was happily surprised. There's nothing groundbreaking here in the slightest, but the poem is pleasant enough. I like the structure you have chosen, and the image of 'leylandii walls' is nicely done. A 6 for you Sir.
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Sep-02/9:50 AM
Hippy ramblings, I fear. 4. There are some nice touches; 'soft simper drizzle' is lovely, but the idea of relating love to nature is as old as poetry itself and has been done better than this on countless occasions. To describe the sun as a 'round red orb' does highlight a lack of imagination perhaps...?
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Sep-02/10:05 AM
Unpleasant stuff to be coming from a 14 year old's pen. Your language is basic, but the sense of bitterness is really quite vitriolic, and therefore wins you a 5. Now go away and think happy thoughts.
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Sep-02/4:52 PM
This is utter shit. 0. Your final line 'a gothic dream' speaks volumes. You try to invoke interest through obtuse imagery and a strange form, and you do initially succeed, but closer inspection produces the opinion that this is nothing other than 100% unadulterated crap. Go hang your head in shame.
Re: Wise Clogg! by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	8-Sep-02/4:58 PM
I concur with Beakism. A decent effort DA; it raised a chuckle from myself and so I bestow you with a 7.
Re: I'm Sorry by PawnedTidal	8-Sep-02/5:03 PM
With a little extra work you could have left me feelng utterly empty inside. 8. Short, concise and filled with startling strong sentences. The best poem I've read for a while. I commend you Sir.
Re: The Confession by [mojo]	8-Sep-02/5:09 PM
I have two thoughts about this poem. I began reading, and thought that this was an unbelievable situation described badly. I especially disliked the repetition of the last two lines of the poem; I thought it crass and naff. However, I completely unexpected the twist. The last two stanzas I read with complete interest, and especiallly liked the way the last two lines were similiar, but also differed. I'm convinced. A cracking poem, worthy of an 8.
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Sep-02/5:31 PM
I'm speechless. I'm sorry, and I have no wish whatsoever to spark a race war, but as a Brit this typifies what I hate about Yanks. Where is your style? This is an absolute horror of a piece. 0, and for the first time ever if I could give minus points I would. The worst piece of shit I've ever read on this site. I can't believe a poem has been posted going through the alphabet for inspiration. Not only that, but your verses are completely and utterly uninspiring. The final line beggars belief, and your use of caps throughout and the various references to homosexuality suggest that you are a child pretending to be an adult. Awful.
Re: TV Star by richsaun	8-Sep-02/5:33 PM
Why the capitals throughout? One written for Children's Hour. Only under 5's should like this. 3. Crap.
Re: Ever Felt by nightii	10-Sep-02/11:31 AM
I like this. 8. The drug references are risque (have you ever noticed that people shy away from commenting on poems alluding to drugs?) but nicely done, and the final section ends the poem succinctly. The short lines add atmosphere to the piece. I'm impressed.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Sep-02/11:46 AM
Boring. 5. This attempts to emulate Dylan but fails. The ending is weak and the whole affair simply leaves me cold.
Re: My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus	10-Sep-02/11:50 AM
Clever. 8. The second stanza is the weakest, but the final two are excellent. However young man, you're currently breaking the law by having underage sex, and have been reported to the relevant authorities already. Look forward to a lifetime of desperately shielding your arse from fellow inmates.
Re: Winter by morffrom	10-Sep-02/11:57 AM
This is both sweet and lovely, but also inaccurate. Is a frozen butterfly (note the 'r' in the correct spelling) really a tear in heaven? I very much doubt it, but for your beautiful imagery you score 8 regardless. However, the haiku is rather whimsical and vague. What exactly are you trying to convey? I have no idea, and I suspect that you don't either.
Re: Thank You Mom by savannah	10-Sep-02/4:10 PM
Sentimental slop. 0. I can't award anything for this I'm afraid. Far too cheesy, and to start so many lines 'Thank you...' indicates that you are utterly devoid of inspiration. I'm sure that your mum would love this tribute, but frankly, I hate it. Horrible stuff. Be ashamed, please?
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Sep-02/4:24 PM
Do Nirvana T-Shirts indicate deepness? I think not. 3. A poor poem. I like the idea behind the piece, but your execution leaves a sour taste in the mouth. Are the line breaks meaningful? Only you know this, but I personally doubt it. I grant you, parts are perceptive and intelligently done, but for me, as a whole, it just doesn't work. Sorry.
regarding some deleted poem...	10-Sep-02/4:39 PM
This stinks. 1. You are perfectly entitled to your own form and if you wish to write one long line of poetry even though it is a swin to read, good luck to you, and if I like it I will tell you as much. However, this I think is horrible; 'our point of view is clouded in that mystery of soul'? Crawl out of your own arse and try and write something half decent next time.
Re: Inner Peace by god	10-Sep-02/4:41 PM
Profound. 7. I like the idea behind this, and I think I see what you are trying to convey. You should be aware however, that your wife also lurks about this website. If I were you, I'd keep her chained up in the kitchen or bedroom where I could see her.
Re: Ode to Molly by knickytoy	2-Oct-02/1:39 PM
This has not come from your pen, but from your rectum instead. 1. 'My wittle honey' is so nauseating that I dry-retched on impulse, and the only saving grace is that you do not thrust more of this bile upon us. Terrible.