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One (Free verse) by ben When I came here I was one
With no one to phone
Or call me home
I hate to moan
Its so alone
When you are one
Up the ladder:
Why Me?
Down the ladder:
Turn your back
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.142857
Posted: August 24, 2002 9:47 AM PDT; Last modified: August 24, 2002 9:47 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.769479 Overall Rank: 11383 Comments:
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god'swife @ 209.179.212.114
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24-Aug-02/9:59 AM
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Your poetry is like a babbling brook of insightful wisdom. 10
Your poetry is like a babbling brook of insightful wisdom. 10
ben you are evil and full of the devil...i curse you...and have sent a swarm of locusts to carry away and eat your mother's cooking...you went on a reading spree back there friend....ye made some comments that surely were false and misleading...i demand satassfiction...everything you voted well for clearly wasn't and vice versa....you my good man are a burden to your first name...i demand that you re-name yourself, "fifi", this instant...thank you..your peg leg "bachus"! <brought to you by 'go-fast' the better way to go, and 'fermunda weeze' cancer of the lung mixed with just the right amount of bubonic plague> 1/10
bacchus-thank you for your good wishes, they are much appreciated in this world of cynicism and easy virtue. God's wife, you have clear vision and if god ever gets tired of you, I will be here for you. I like your poetry too-Anne Sexton would be proud of you-my all time favourite.
twas nothing beast!
It's a tad too depressing for my tastes, but you manage to convey the sense of loneliness without resorting to the any of the cliched stereotypes like 'darkness', etc, and so for that I gives you a 7. I look forward to more.
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