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Turn your back (Free verse) by kliq Who are you?
Standing in the dark
I don't see you
Come into the light
Why do you reject the light?
What did they do?
The creatures of the night
Do they belong to you?
I don't blame you!
That's all we really are
Till someone finds us
Till someone cracks us
We are always in the dark
To them.
I don't know you!
And I won't see you
Until the day I crack that soul
All you'll be is a stranger in the night
So I'll turn my back
And walk away
And I'll come back
When I know you, when I have light to shine
On your dark exterior
Then I'll find you
Then I'll know you
Then you wont be in dark!
Up the ladder:
One
Down the ladder:
suicide lost the plot
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Posted: October 27, 2002 2:54 AM PST; Last modified: October 27, 2002 2:54 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.769479 Overall Rank: 11389 Comments:
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rockinindividual @ 68.85.69.50
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1-Jan-03/1:16 PM
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its rhythm is somewhat messed up...makes reading it kind of jerky...4
Sooo what your portraying here is a mockery of society because we judge others without getting to know them first?? Correct me if I'm wrong, but this is what I got from it anyway...As far as my commentary goes, I really did think about the style, pattern, theme, if the poem "grabbed me" per say, and you aren't going to like this, I apologize for my honesty, but...I didn't care for it. It is not a style I enjoy: maybe I've seen it too much or just need elements such as imagery & whimsey in poetry, but that's just me. Others might completely relate. And it's not like I write about kittens & daisies or like reading that kind of material for that matter, I mean Plath is my favorite for goodness sake, so it's not that I don't appreciate the dark undertones...or flat-out obvious dark "overtones" like in this poem...
Thanks for the read however, ~Sunny 140 view(s)
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