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suicide lost the plot (Lyric) by T'ien its thrown to me in uncertainty
as things go out of sync
ive thrown my quilted memory
and lose my will to think
i lost my frozen time with you
but could never displace the link
with all this broken history
we're still below the brink
while losing all this slipping fear
of time when you may leave
i hold to me a pictured face
and throw a heart from my sleeve
your crystaline figure distorts
as the mirror begins to greive
the shattered beuaty weeps your name
and your love is my wish to acheive
Your gone from within me
as a shell i clot
but prospect frees me pure
as suicide lost the plot
Up the ladder:
Turn your back
Down the ladder:
peer pressure leads to awful outcomes
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 4.142857
Posted: November 23, 2002 3:32 PM PST; Last modified: January 8, 2003 1:22 PM PSTWeighted score: 4.769479 Overall Rank: 11385 Comments:
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ciantu @ 216.128.137.167
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23-Nov-02/4:13 PM
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if it's true i feel for you
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T'ien @ 217.36.202.68
> ciantu
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23-Nov-02/4:19 PM
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it is something i just wrote in pure emotion and felt i needed it to be judged
very mischevious, but your spelling is shit, i'm sure you've heard that before though huh?
wot is every1s obsession with spelling here does it really matter you no wot i mean lol ive only been on this site a few hours and already im noticing some childhood playground hierarchy (probably spelt rong also) heh mebbe your just a bunch of misfits who like to pretend their intellectual
So who are you really?
what do u mean im sure nobodody here nos who anybody is thats the beuaty of posting this on the internet
No, really.
Isn't me, I've had finals.
wtf are finals
a collection of false hoops and #2 pencils, and it's not me neither.. even i am not this totally unoriginal, i'm unoriginally total.l
all right im lost wots going on wot was the question and are u saying im unoriginal and how is that
I FOR ONE THINK YOU ARE FUNNY.
thanks i think o well wotever
lmao I totally agree with the spelling lol
If anyone really needs to know, Lark Angel is Lark Angel and no-one else.
It's a bloody good song, but I thought there was another verse to it last time you showed me, LA. Or is it my memory remembering things that didn't happen?
Oh yeah, and 10/10
your memory
i cudnt be bothewed to wead it, I dont like de title.hav a 0 for bein a pwetentious arse
year well freddy your obviously a moronic retard that cant tell left from right i mean u wrote a poem about arnold schwarzenegger which i did read btw it was a load of crap
HEY Y'ALL ITS ME, CLETUS AGAIN, JUST THOUGHT ID ASK, ANY OF YOU SUBSCRIBE TO ANY GOOD GUN MAGAZINES? YOU ALL SEEM LIKE YOU WOULD THOUGH FOR DIFFERENT REASON TO ME!!!
wow
"as a shell i clot" funny stuff..ahhh this isn't all that bad really...it's better the 5 or 6th tyme aruonde. mi tinks.
I'm going to give you a ten again, but you'll never make it to the top fifteen...well, you might, but you'll get voted straight out.
i will give u a low mark to annoy u since i think i gave u a high one last time its stupid to post it again
the rhymes feel too forced, cheapening anything you might want us to take seriously. flow feels off in a number of places as well.
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