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One (Free verse) by ben

When I came here I was one With no one to phone Or call me home I hate to moan Its so alone When you are one

Tarquin De La Bog 29-Aug-02/5:18 AM
It's a tad too depressing for my tastes, but you manage to convey the sense of loneliness without resorting to the any of the cliched stereotypes like 'darkness', etc, and so for that I gives you a 7. I look forward to more.




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