Re: angst of the saints by calliope	17-Jan-06/10:39 AM
A publisher's eye is defined by what sells. That is, what people buy, what they like. Don't make it publishers' fault.
Re: a comment on My Reason by PoeticXTC	17-Jan-06/10:36 AM
An emotional piece of writing: "For sale: Baby shoes, never used." - Hemmingway Creating or representing emotion in writing usually has very little to do with yelling and emphasis. Drop the caps. Add some emotion.
Re: A Haiku by amanda_dcosta	17-Jan-06/10:33 AM
1Tell 2me 3more, 4tell 5me 6more 1A 2hai 3ku's 4some 5thing 6I 7don't 8know. 1A 2-5 3-7 4-5 5or 6so? Nice. A good commentary on the limitations of haiku-length.
Re: Sky All Around Me (goddess edit) by ecargo	17-Jan-06/10:28 AM
On a Friends rerun I saw last night, there's a morbid zoo custodian who addresses an opossum as "enigma of the trees, upside-down denizen of the night." This reminded me of that a little.
Re: Do 20 always make this poem sense? by Prince of Void	17-Jan-06/10:20 AM
This poem does not make sense.
Re: They Knew Me From Adam by D. $ Fontera	17-Jan-06/10:17 AM
Lose some of the throwaway phrases and commentary - "But, of course, it is harder than you can imagine," "over, yet again," the last bit. Otherwise, nice.
Re: Reap by ecargo	17-Jan-06/10:14 AM
This is really great, biteme. My only suggestion: wreathe should be wreath.
Re: A tribute to our most precious Pearl by amanda_dcosta	17-Jan-06/10:13 AM
Good work, Amanda. I especially like the first and seventh verses (though "did be" should just be "were"). Nice.
Re: a comment on Do 20 always make this poem sense? by Prince of Void	15-Jan-06/11:53 PM
Can you tell us what a line like "Do 20 always make this poem sense" means?
Re: Racism 3 by Dovina	15-Jan-06/4:10 PM
They did, didn't they? Add a stanza: How is what she thought TRUE?
Re: a comment on Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac	15-Jan-06/12:49 AM
Good call. Neither is yours.
Re: Racism 2 by Dovina	14-Jan-06/10:50 AM
In short, if you want to improve your poetry, consider selling your house in Orange County, quitting your job, and moving somewhere with real ethnic balance, like Charlotte.
Re: Racism 2 by Dovina	14-Jan-06/10:47 AM
I cannot fucking believe you're still doing this. Please, for once take the hint: YOU DON'T KNOW ABOUT MINORITIES. YOU DON'T ACTUALLY KNOW ANY BLACK PEOPLE. EVERYTHING YOU WRITE ABOUT THEM COMES OFF SOUNDING INSANE.
Re: a comment on The Prayer Vendor by Enkidu	12-Jan-06/6:22 PM
That or because he's offering them up for sacrifices, for persecution.
Re: a comment on The Prayer Vendor by Enkidu	12-Jan-06/6:20 PM
I think he means like, "That dress becomes you."
Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic	12-Jan-06/5:51 PM
I'm not trying to start an argument, just commenting on how I could stand to learn gentleness.
Re: a comment on cat by Dental Panic	12-Jan-06/5:50 PM
You know -=Dark_Angel=-,P.I. knows Hawking.
Re: a comment on Flow by zodiac	12-Jan-06/4:18 PM
That's a nice theory, and I'd love to claim it. But my line-ends are almost always for bad rhyme or bad rhythm (ie, -room/come, good/hard/flood, be/-ory). What words I decide to rhyme or make fall at that point in the rhythm does have something to do with what you're talking about. And richa, too. I've never put it in so many words, but I feel it.
Re: a comment on Tulip by richa	12-Jan-06/1:52 PM
I had to read it twice, but I got it. I don't know about punctuation. A comma after line1 might please everyone.
Re: The copper man and Labrador by Caducus	11-Jan-06/9:35 PM
The latest victim of the multiple self-voting bug. So sad, Caducus. So sad.