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They Knew Me From Adam (Free verse) by D. $ Fontera
I tried to forget my tumbling universe shifting things; that which is uncontrollable. But, of course, it is harder than you can imagine. One day familiar to today, but somehow closer to yesterday, i will be sitting; staring at the future. Now, the future and I will argue. We will bicker over trite things: philosophy the economy, the way that girl's hair moves and ultimately I will be right, by every definition of the word. May the past come knocking; should it suggest a wiser resolution, i will offer but a nod and relive the mistake over, yet again. For it is no mystery to these past selves that I am quick to act. And while from swiftness comes regret, i am not one to waste much time consoling myself.

Up the ladder: Wrong
Down the ladder: Judgement

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7948
Posted: August 17, 2004 12:31 AM PDT; Last modified: January 15, 2006 5:39 PM PST
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[7] Dovina @ 209.247.222.86 | 15-Jan-06/8:18 PM | Reply
When you use a twist on a cliche in your title, I expect to find some allusion to the cliche in the poem. I like the third verse.
[8] zodiac @ 209.193.14.154 | 17-Jan-06/10:17 AM | Reply
Lose some of the throwaway phrases and commentary - "But, of course, it is harder than you can imagine," "over, yet again," the last bit. Otherwise, nice.
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