Re: THE FATHER by w~* ATHENA *~w	23-Feb-03/1:40 AM
fix the end, otherwise perfect. Less is more, more is more. I'm a whore.
Re: Omerta el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}>	23-Feb-03/1:35 AM
Blood on the tracks. I swear, you're on to something. Find find find.
Re: Ad patres el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}>	23-Feb-03/12:56 AM
"Dusking" and "same sky" you have crossed the thresh-hold, my favorite poem of yours.
Re: a comment on Ad patres el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}>	23-Feb-03/12:54 AM
Rhode Island. I believe she's safe and sound.
Re: Reply To the 9,000 Poets Against War. by Blue Magpie	22-Feb-03/11:58 PM
A precious poem. Oh, how needing I am of the contrary point of view. This is a great poem, especially when spoken aloud. The last couplet's a true killer. I think you are under appreciated, congratulations, the world knows nothing of its greatest men.
Re: a comment on Moo Gai Pai lover (dedicated to Settle) by Sylvia Bravo	22-Feb-03/2:55 PM
I know where to get a fairly realistic strap-on, if you like. Just say the word. I can fuck you in the mouth with it while jacking you off, but then you'll have to do the same for me. Would you like that?
Re: The Voice of the Night (dedicated to Mr. PIG) by Sylvia Bravo	22-Feb-03/2:37 PM
You should write a poem about a woman who is such a psycho telephone stalker, people have to change their home phone numbers to avoid the bitch. Never mind, you'd do a crappy job because you're a terrible writer, and an even worse human being.
Re: a comment on Curry Gives You The Shits by spank me baby yeah	22-Feb-03/2:28 PM
I write like him when I'm at his house. Well, actually, I don't write anything like him, but his computer spits out those extra letters at the end, if that's what you mean. What do you mean hit enter?
Re: THE POEMRANKER SEXCHART VERSION 1.2 FINAL by TanHand	21-Feb-03/10:57 PM
Quite flattering, and astounding. How you young darlings manage incest so instictively, and everyone makes us believe it's evil. God bless Jacko for sleeping close to the kiddies, and God bless Settle for his abnormal brilliant warp.
Re: a comment on Curry Gives You The Shits by spank me baby yeah	21-Feb-03/10:06 PM
and psycho bitches.m
Re: Crucifixion by Mr Pig	20-Feb-03/3:05 PM
I love the last line. I can picture it, you know the look on his face as he's trying to swallow. Wonderful.
Re: Revelation ( 666 ) by Mr Pig	20-Feb-03/3:01 PM
WOW. This is great. I love it. Must have a better title. "Revelation" or pick up the damn book and take a look at that last chapter, just flip the pages, a title might just pop out at you. How would you feel about taking out 'the'in L2? It would bring the count short by one, but it would make up for it in content. What do you think?
Re: Resurrection (for Gods Wife) by Mr Pig	20-Feb-03/2:56 PM
The forty nights were spent in the desert months before the resurrection. Again the title doesn't jive for me. I think the haiku works very well intil the last line. Too preachy. Tell me something nuetral at the end, to give the blood more power.
Re: Crucifixion by Mr Pig	20-Feb-03/2:49 PM
Hmmm, it was the jews who laughed, the romans were completely uninterested. I prefer blood to wine, though the tie in with supper is a good one. The title invokes a different scene. Right a haiku about the action in the title, keep this one and give it a different title. Judas is one of my favorite characters in this myth. Keep exploring him. Have you seen The Last Temptation of Christ?
Re: a comment on Skin Milk by Fear of Garbage	20-Feb-03/8:29 AM
I mean the second use of the words. They are terrific with gun.
Re: Horus8 Vs. Book Learning by TanHand	20-Feb-03/8:24 AM
Great satire, brilliant lines S2. If you were trying to make fun, you failed. You just gave his craft that much more thrust. reving engines, power drive.
Re: INDECENCY by TanHand	20-Feb-03/8:15 AM
Ends badly. Like the cake, you have stained a well crafted thing. I love L2,S2, though I'm sure I'm not interpreting it the way you meant. I would end this poem at "ALL MY DANCING..."
Re: Skin Milk by Fear of Garbage	20-Feb-03/8:04 AM
Fascinating. Awkward. "You are not you" doesn't make sense here and detracts from what you're saying. it would seem he is what he is, and you have discribed it. I like the sort of dumb way this is written. Even the illiterate have insights. Can you find something more interesting for 'well-muscled'?
Re: Death Of Day ( re-edit) by Mr Pig	20-Feb-03/1:19 AM
Change the tense of the last line. Somehow "appears" works for this. Some new pressent beginning.Death of day, and then a moon right now.
Re: shotgun: taps in december by <{Baba^Yaga}>	20-Feb-03/1:09 AM
Sorry I missed this. Very fine. Some tiny edits, I'll let you know. But otherwise an insightful tale.