Re: The Voice of the Night (dedicated to Mr. PIG) by Sylvia Bravo	22-Feb-03/2:37 PM
You should write a poem about a woman who is such a psycho telephone stalker, people have to change their home phone numbers to avoid the bitch. Never mind, you'd do a crappy job because you're a terrible writer, and an even worse human being.
Re: a comment on Curry Gives You The Shits by spank me baby yeah	22-Feb-03/2:28 PM
I write like him when I'm at his house. Well, actually, I don't write anything like him, but his computer spits out those extra letters at the end, if that's what you mean. What do you mean hit enter?
Re: THE POEMRANKER SEXCHART VERSION 1.2 FINAL by TanHand	21-Feb-03/10:57 PM
Quite flattering, and astounding. How you young darlings manage incest so instictively, and everyone makes us believe it's evil. God bless Jacko for sleeping close to the kiddies, and God bless Settle for his abnormal brilliant warp.
Re: a comment on Curry Gives You The Shits by spank me baby yeah	21-Feb-03/10:06 PM
and psycho bitches.m
Re: Crucifixion by Mr Pig	20-Feb-03/3:05 PM
I love the last line. I can picture it, you know the look on his face as he's trying to swallow. Wonderful.
Re: Revelation ( 666 ) by Mr Pig	20-Feb-03/3:01 PM
WOW. This is great. I love it. Must have a better title. "Revelation" or pick up the damn book and take a look at that last chapter, just flip the pages, a title might just pop out at you. How would you feel about taking out 'the'in L2? It would bring the count short by one, but it would make up for it in content. What do you think?
Re: Resurrection (for Gods Wife) by Mr Pig	20-Feb-03/2:56 PM
The forty nights were spent in the desert months before the resurrection. Again the title doesn't jive for me. I think the haiku works very well intil the last line. Too preachy. Tell me something nuetral at the end, to give the blood more power.
Re: Crucifixion by Mr Pig	20-Feb-03/2:49 PM
Hmmm, it was the jews who laughed, the romans were completely uninterested. I prefer blood to wine, though the tie in with supper is a good one. The title invokes a different scene. Right a haiku about the action in the title, keep this one and give it a different title. Judas is one of my favorite characters in this myth. Keep exploring him. Have you seen The Last Temptation of Christ?
Re: a comment on Skin Milk by Fear of Garbage	20-Feb-03/8:29 AM
I mean the second use of the words. They are terrific with gun.
Re: Horus8 Vs. Book Learning by TanHand	20-Feb-03/8:24 AM
Great satire, brilliant lines S2. If you were trying to make fun, you failed. You just gave his craft that much more thrust. reving engines, power drive.
Re: INDECENCY by TanHand	20-Feb-03/8:15 AM
Ends badly. Like the cake, you have stained a well crafted thing. I love L2,S2, though I'm sure I'm not interpreting it the way you meant. I would end this poem at "ALL MY DANCING..."
Re: Skin Milk by Fear of Garbage	20-Feb-03/8:04 AM
Fascinating. Awkward. "You are not you" doesn't make sense here and detracts from what you're saying. it would seem he is what he is, and you have discribed it. I like the sort of dumb way this is written. Even the illiterate have insights. Can you find something more interesting for 'well-muscled'?
Re: Death Of Day ( re-edit) by Mr Pig	20-Feb-03/1:19 AM
Change the tense of the last line. Somehow "appears" works for this. Some new pressent beginning.Death of day, and then a moon right now.
Re: shotgun: taps in december by <{Baba^Yaga}>	20-Feb-03/1:09 AM
Sorry I missed this. Very fine. Some tiny edits, I'll let you know. But otherwise an insightful tale.
Re: Death Of Day ( re-edit) by Mr Pig	17-Feb-03/11:09 PM
Very good, but the tense is mixed up. It's either 'comes' or 'Sun bled........silver assasin appeared".
Re: a comment on The Beauty of His Last Night Wasted by OneFingerAnswer	13-Feb-03/11:49 PM
By the way, "The Beauty Of His Last Night Wasted" Nothing can follow that. Leave it be.
Re: The Beauty of His Last Night Wasted by OneFingerAnswer	13-Feb-03/11:40 PM
You are a writer no doubt. Stupid boy, believing you could change even one thing. They will laugh at you, naive and idealistic. This is not so much a man's world, as a cynic's. Good dear boy, speak, and I shall listen. There are many things expressed here which are beyond the comprehension of fools. Pay no attention to the half-wits. Speak your speak. Bang your fists against the keys, I'm listening.
Re: Household Sex Agents (tooles) by <{Baba^Yaga}>	13-Feb-03/11:03 PM
It's Gardener. Some if these are hysterica,l especially the first.
Re: Amputee by INTRANSIT	13-Feb-03/11:00 PM
Bada beam Bada boom.
Re: a comment on Grampa's Proverb by OneFingerAnswer	13-Feb-03/2:32 PM
Home-made I presume. Such expense ingredients for an undergrad. Care to swap recipes? I have make a mince-meat pie people just 'die' for, if you get my meaning... Hey OneFinger, what if he uses a gun, knife, poison, etc. Does the bird still come out of it singing?