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Revelation ( 666 ) (Haiku) by Mr Pig Beautiful Angel,
Mutton dressed as lamb,
Sun consumes Earth.
Up the ladder:
almost 12.30
Down the ladder:
Hot Maid
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.48
Posted: February 20, 2003 9:35 AM PST; Last modified: February 21, 2003 3:02 AM PSTWeighted score: 5.4767876 Overall Rank: 2829 Comments:
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Shardik @ 24.126.113.154
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20-Feb-03/1:23 PM
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What if the earth consmes the sun after it has turned into a red dwarf, naturally than the earth breaks solar wind? groovy.
Watch it I know Arthur Walding.
WOW. This is great. I love it. Must have a better title. "Revelation" or pick up the damn book and take a look at that last chapter, just flip the pages, a title might just pop out at you.
How would you feel about taking out 'the'in L2? It would bring the count short by one, but it would make up for it in content. What do you think?
Profound, just out on the counts on some but otherwise thoughtful and very good ...10
Derivative. Recycling of cliches. Not very good. Sorry.
I LOVE THESE, HAYIKU THINGS HOW DO YOU DO THEM PIG MAN?
Nice. It's difficult to give advice on something as short as a haiku, especially when it's as good as this, so I'll limit myself to just saying "Nice".
Bill Z. Bub breaks into song:
"666 the Number of the Beast 666 the one for you and me" -Iron Maiden, "The Number of the Beast" Ah, nothing like the classics.
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5 4 what gives?
Sing it Bill Z Bub. Right on! Children of the Damned. Run to the Hills. AHHHHHHHHHHHHH FREAKS that write stupid religious haiku.
I can't paint a picture with it.
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