Re: The Feild In Which I Live by Fear of Garbage	28-Feb-03/10:44 PM
Get rid of 'then'int he last line otherwise perfect. 10
Re: the midget of humiliation by Bill Z Bub	28-Feb-03/10:38 PM
Where the hell have you been? I suffer through one more trial and no Lucifer to tempt me with his light. Lovely poem. 'Pea coat, stool-pigeon, cracked lips...' This poem is speaking to my twisted-up guts. Last stanza, second line 'punctures this skin' try it, you'll like it.
Re: The Fate of the Gilt by OneFingerAnswer	26-Feb-03/4:35 PM
Isn't "hath" in line 2? The end is better than the beginning. That is my personal flaw. e
Re: Fuck the system by which we live by Lucifer	26-Feb-03/4:28 PM
Sometimes the gold gets swallowed, but then it comes out your ass buried undered a pile of crap. This needs to be dug through. 
Re: a comment on Greek Tragedy#1 by Mr Pig	25-Feb-03/3:51 PM
You are a funny thing, my bitter-sweet Seraphim. Last night I thought for certain Nanshe was 'a girl' as you put it, I suppose you mean anatomically, but that makes no difference to me. Will you take me for a ride? I know how to ignore the batteries hum. I'll lay back and press my cheek against yours. Pop-A- Wheelie.
Re: a comment on Greek Tragedy#1 by Mr Pig	25-Feb-03/3:28 PM
Thank you my sweet, I shall plant this like a magic bean, like a last resort. Let me take this opportunity to say the word Ally ten times. Ally Ally Ally Ally Ally Ally Ally Ally Ally Ally Ally.
Re: a comment on Greek Tragedy#1 by Mr Pig	25-Feb-03/2:44 PM
Thanks for the link. I am not an expert but have pretty much gron up on the myths and yes they influence me a great deal. I think that's why I was confused. I knew the figures in your poem and what they represent, but I think the form is too narrow for the point you're trying to make. I'ts an inside job, and even as an insider I pretty much would have to read your mind to understand. For example I didn't know that about seahorses and that threw the whole concept out the window, even though I understood all the rest. So myth is one thing we hold in common. Mr. Pig, why are all the boys afraid of me?
Re: Greek Tragedy#1 by Mr Pig	25-Feb-03/2:03 PM
I'm comfoozled Mr. Pig.
Re: "Crying" by Jaketiger	24-Feb-03/9:37 PM
all feeling and bad spelling. Were's the art?
Re: He put a price on her head by Nanshe	24-Feb-03/9:20 PM
Good structure, nice surprise. Usually I have a problem with diaphanous, overused poetry word, but works well here.
Re: We by Nanshe	24-Feb-03/9:17 PM
Great first two lines. The end is muddled.
Re: In the darkness by CrAzYlAdY Surukain	24-Feb-03/8:51 PM
Keep 'thrift'.
Re: I'll love you Heather, for ever and ever by TanHand	24-Feb-03/8:28 PM
Lovely, freshly laundered sheets lovely New socks lovely The smell of burning dust from turning on the furnace for the first time this year lovely. Couplet after S2 needs rewriting. Doesn't jive with feel of poem.
Re: Ad patres el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}>	23-Feb-03/5:25 PM
Stanza after killer stanza. Is it the weather or my hormones? Everybodies writing is sharp these days.
Re: a comment on THE FATHER by w~* ATHENA *~w	23-Feb-03/5:18 PM
Please extrapolate some more, I don't understand. Clue me in.
Re: The Blooding by Mr Pig	23-Feb-03/5:11 PM
Top-notch. I think if I had read this in some publication i would have pased out. There are things I want to say to you, but I no it is better not to reveal them. We are a kind. This poem captures me like a trap. The words are so inticing, and then whoosh! the rope strangles my ankle, and in a split second I'm upside-down and dangling. Cut me down Mr. Pig. Take me back to the cottage, I'll fry you some taters, scrub out the bathtub, and all with Lady's hands. Seriously you've built a profound thing. "Black jelly" "huntsmen" again the Judas- your father, doing what he must, and all of us hating him for it. Most importantly you cross the barrier and make menstruation a universal experience. I have never seen a man attempt it before, and I doubt I well ever see one do a better job of it.
Re: Resurrection (for Gods Wife) by Mr Pig	23-Feb-03/4:55 PM
Interesting. Very interesting. Somehow you manage Judas quite well. I'm intrigued by the way you make him blandly human. I think the 40 nights and the bleeding go very well together. It was a trial in the desert for him, and this life is a trial for us. We bleed through most of it, not always the bad kind, especially for we girls. Men use to bleed, but then the boys became frightened by it. Tell me, my beautiful Pig, why can't the boys be men? Things are getting desperate. I'm giving this poem a ten because it says so much. Jesus can bleed but Judas musn't, it's not that he can't, it just that he has to make sure he plays his part inorder to make the promise come true. Fuck the pieces of silver, I believe he would have done it for free. If there is a Heaven, God must be showering Judas with gratitude. Thank you so much for the demonstrations of love, it is greatly appreciated. Love you back.
Re: Unmasking Wyverns by horus8	23-Feb-03/1:57 AM
You're power is in the seaweed egg-drop. Or perhaps it's the Ahi, broiled just right. Either way you win, straight out, 1st prize, and here we go...
Re: A prayer for my mum by Mr Pig (again)	23-Feb-03/1:50 AM
"Magic tears of Happiness". A mother's tears.
Re: A prayer for my mum by Mr Pig (again)	23-Feb-03/1:46 AM
Thisis going to take weeks for me. My son is 12, sleeps in my bed, holds my hand everywhere. Tells me he loves me 5, maybe 6 times each day. He looks at me straight in the eyes.