| Re: a comment on Greek Tragedy#1 by Mr Pig |
25-Feb-03/2:44 PM |
Thanks for the link. I am not an expert but have pretty much gron up on the myths and yes they influence me a great deal. I think that's why I was confused. I knew the figures in your poem and what they represent, but I think the form is too narrow for the point you're trying to make. I'ts an inside job, and even as an insider I pretty much would have to read your mind to understand. For example I didn't know that about seahorses and that threw the whole concept out the window, even though I understood all the rest. So myth is one thing we hold in common.
Mr. Pig, why are all the boys afraid of me?
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| Re: Greek Tragedy#1 by Mr Pig |
25-Feb-03/2:03 PM |
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| Re: "Crying" by Jaketiger |
24-Feb-03/9:37 PM |
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all feeling and bad spelling. Were's the art?
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| Re: He put a price on her head by Nanshe |
24-Feb-03/9:20 PM |
Good structure, nice surprise. Usually I have a problem with diaphanous, overused poetry word, but works well here.
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| Re: We by Nanshe |
24-Feb-03/9:17 PM |
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Great first two lines. The end is muddled.
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| Re: In the darkness by CrAzYlAdY Surukain |
24-Feb-03/8:51 PM |
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| Re: I'll love you Heather, for ever and ever by TanHand |
24-Feb-03/8:28 PM |
Lovely, freshly laundered sheets lovely
New socks lovely
The smell of burning dust from turning on the furnace for the first time this year lovely. Couplet after S2 needs rewriting. Doesn't jive with feel of poem.
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| Re: Ad patres el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
23-Feb-03/5:25 PM |
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Stanza after killer stanza. Is it the weather or my hormones? Everybodies writing is sharp these days.
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| Re: a comment on THE FATHER by w~* ATHENA *~w |
23-Feb-03/5:18 PM |
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Please extrapolate some more, I don't understand. Clue me in.
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| Re: The Blooding by Mr Pig |
23-Feb-03/5:11 PM |
Top-notch. I think if I had read this in some publication i would have pased out. There are things I want to say to you, but I no it is better not to reveal them. We are a kind.
This poem captures me like a trap. The words are so inticing, and then whoosh! the rope strangles my ankle, and in a split second I'm upside-down and dangling. Cut me down Mr. Pig. Take me back to the cottage, I'll fry you some taters, scrub out the bathtub, and all with Lady's hands.
Seriously you've built a profound thing. "Black jelly" "huntsmen" again the Judas- your father, doing what he must, and all of us hating him for it. Most importantly you cross the barrier and make menstruation a universal experience. I have never seen a man attempt it before, and I doubt I well ever see one do a better job of it.
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| Re: Resurrection (for Gods Wife) by Mr Pig |
23-Feb-03/4:55 PM |
Interesting. Very interesting. Somehow you manage Judas quite well. I'm intrigued by the way you make him blandly human. I think the 40 nights and the bleeding go very well together. It was a trial in the desert for him, and this life is a trial for us. We bleed through most of it, not always the bad kind, especially for we girls. Men use to bleed, but then the boys became frightened by it. Tell me, my beautiful Pig, why can't the boys be men? Things are getting desperate.
I'm giving this poem a ten because it says so much. Jesus can bleed but Judas musn't, it's not that he can't, it just that he has to make sure he plays his part inorder to make the promise come true. Fuck the pieces of silver, I believe he would have done it for free. If there is a Heaven, God must be showering Judas with gratitude.
Thank you so much for the demonstrations of love, it is greatly appreciated. Love you back.
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| Re: Unmasking Wyverns by horus8 |
23-Feb-03/1:57 AM |
You're power is in the seaweed egg-drop. Or perhaps it's the Ahi, broiled just right. Either way you win, straight out, 1st prize, and here we go...
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| Re: A prayer for my mum by Mr Pig (again) |
23-Feb-03/1:50 AM |
"Magic tears of Happiness". A mother's tears.
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| Re: A prayer for my mum by Mr Pig (again) |
23-Feb-03/1:46 AM |
Thisis going to take weeks for me. My son is 12, sleeps in my bed, holds my hand everywhere. Tells me he loves me 5, maybe 6 times each day. He looks at me straight in the eyes.
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| Re: THE FATHER by w~* ATHENA *~w |
23-Feb-03/1:40 AM |
fix the end, otherwise perfect. Less is more, more is more. I'm a whore.
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| Re: Omerta el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
23-Feb-03/1:35 AM |
Blood on the tracks. I swear, you're on to something. Find find find.
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| Re: Ad patres el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
23-Feb-03/12:56 AM |
"Dusking" and "same sky" you have crossed the thresh-hold, my favorite poem of yours.
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| Re: a comment on Ad patres el prostitute by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
23-Feb-03/12:54 AM |
Rhode Island. I believe she's safe and sound.
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| Re: Reply To the 9,000 Poets Against War. by Blue Magpie |
22-Feb-03/11:58 PM |
A precious poem. Oh, how needing I am of the contrary point of view. This is a great poem, especially when spoken aloud. The last couplet's a true killer. I think you are under appreciated, congratulations, the world knows nothing of its greatest men.
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| Re: a comment on Moo Gai Pai lover (dedicated to Settle) by Sylvia Bravo |
22-Feb-03/2:55 PM |
I know where to get a fairly realistic strap-on, if you like. Just say the word. I can fuck you in the mouth with it while jacking you off, but then you'll have to do the same for me. Would you like that?
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