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In the darkness (Free verse) by CrAzYlAdY Surukain In this world we see
Nothing gets to me
God has left
Leaving me in the thrift
The darkness swallowing me
So thick I cannot see
No one can help thee
From the sins
I have hidden within
To hear my heart beat
Is the only heat
The only sound
Loneliness...
Then it stops
Leaving me lifeless in the dark
In this world we see
Nothing gets to me
In the darkness
Up the ladder:
Options (Senryu)
Down the ladder:
The second coming
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Posted: February 23, 2003 3:09 PM PST; Last modified: February 23, 2003 3:09 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.2689414 Overall Rank: 3837 Comments:
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Ray @ 207.177.68.9
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24-Feb-03/9:47 AM
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good poem,like it!
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CrAzYlAdY Surukain @ 66.218.250.64
> Ray
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24-Feb-03/9:54 AM
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woo thx, my mistake in there made me feel like an idiot, its supposed to be DRIFT not THRIFT.
Keep 'thrift'.
Sure y not. *shrugs*
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