Re: a comment on Portrait of a King by MacFrantic	3-Aug-06/12:32 PM
This is actually less complicated then it seems. The title is accurate. The narrator is looking at the portrait of a king. The reference to God is sarcastic.
Re: Here's your God by Caducus	2-Aug-06/8:40 PM
Just good poetry...
Re: fragment by ecargo	31-Jul-06/1:12 PM
Great meter. Just great.
Re: A Poem For George Bush by Edna Sweetlove	31-Jul-06/1:09 PM
Good rant. Good ol free speech.
Re: A Cripples Brittle Broken Bones by creepshow	31-Jul-06/1:07 PM
A bit too busy here. The tense changes are a little annoying. However, the last four lines are outstanding and the concept is good.
Re: you & you all congregators by A. Nomaly	31-Jul-06/1:05 PM
Great.
Re: Hot by Dovina	31-Jul-06/1:04 PM
Good message, maybe replace the second vice with something else. Love the rhythm, especially the first stanza.
Re: Major by rahson_s	31-Jul-06/12:59 PM
I love L7. That makes the poem for me.
Re: Diary by Dovina	31-Jul-06/12:57 PM
Verisimilitude throws this off a bit, but I think it fits as a noticeable oddity. Really a good poem, overall.
Re: a comment on Two Fundamentalists Playing Cribbage by MacFrantic	13-Jul-06/11:17 PM
Thank you, much and often
Re: a comment on An Affair with Letters by MacFrantic	8-Jul-06/5:37 PM
I could possibly mean what the title plainly says. It's about affairs and "The Lord's untimely sinning" seems to suit an affair. Oh, and "The" does not begin with W. I see no point in your comment.
Re: a comment on The Angle of your Downfall by MacFrantic	5-Jul-06/8:04 PM
Curiouser and curiouser is a reference to Alice in Wonderland. I'd like to think that falling is one of my more consistent themes and this seemed quite appropriate.
Re: a comment on Late Break by MacFrantic	28-Jun-06/7:33 PM
I rather liked 'deconstruct,' as it lent itself well to the structure. Thank you very much.
Re: A naughty strumpet by John Rambo	29-May-06/6:23 PM
Brilliant! *10*
Re: a comment on Descendent by MacFrantic	25-May-06/10:50 AM
"descendent" has double meaning. It signifies movement downward as well as the relation to ancestors. "descendant" only relates to ancestry. Also, I was just very lazy with the punctuation. I don't even know why I bothered. I'm glad you were displeased by the quality of this poem. It wasn't written to your liking (thank god).
Re: test by zanzina	21-May-06/11:58 PM
Word choice 8 Effort 1 Effect 3 Average *4*
Re: a comment on For Thou by MacFrantic	9-May-06/7:22 PM
'Thee' would assume I am talking directly to the person this is for, and not to myself. Example: 'For thou...in the trees." Also, I never used 'you' directly. I did, in fact, use 'you've' which works better for meter. Note: I used 'my', not 'mine' as well.
Re: A mans obligation by kliq	6-May-06/9:34 PM
If you had spelled two correctly, this would be brilliant. *8*
Re: Freud Spoke Of A Mother's Tongue, But I Interpret Dreams by Ranger	28-Apr-06/8:00 PM
This is definitely a poet's poem. I feel confident enough when I say that this may be the best pure poem on this site. It is catchy, raw, truly FREE verse. It even has the punch at the end that makes your eyes move back to the top and start over again. No matter what the scores on this poem, it deserves no less than a primary addition to my favorites. Of course, Ranger, nothing short of greatness should be expected from you. I hope I've tooted your horn quite sufficiently. *10*
Re: a comment on The Way of Monsters by MacFrantic	20-Apr-06/12:08 PM
Thank you to no limit. I had to do a little editing. "gears" was supposed to be "fears"(I don't know how I overlooked that). I also didn't like that the first stanza was a question, so I changed it. And yes, this poem is about vikings/barbarians. Very keen of you, Ranger.